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I’m falling
falling again into the well, the well with the slippery sides, the well the sucks me down, the well that is so hard to get out of. I know I can’t do it alone but I don’t want to drag him down to. He, who is so bright, a ray of sunshine in this world and me, more shadow than light these days.
I’m falling
falling makes my mind wander, wander to the dark places where my fears reside. They stir and murmur, whispering things in my ears. Playing scenes in front of my eyes of the things I hate most. Betrayal, loneliness are front and centre, those cruel scenes using Him against me. My only star in this dark place has become my fear and that’s when I know..
I’m falling
falling for so long I wonder when it will all end. When I will hit rock bottom, when there will be no return. But I can’t give up. I didn’t last time and I won’t this time. Not when the reward of fighting is so much greater. He will guide me out, whether he knows it or not, it will be Him, it will always be him.
Well, this is off to a pretty intriguing start here. Its clear right from the start here that we've got a powerful theme here with the falling and this sense of repetition that you manage to create there really does resonate rather powerfully with us readers especially with how the paragraphs to follow take on a bit of an echo like quality there as the protagonist describes something that does indeed feel like a bit of a fall here. You can certainly see a bit of a decline there in their thoughts.
I’m falling
the thing about falling is that you’re weightless, nothing grounding you to anything. Everything that used to before is floating out of reach. The good things slip through my fingers like smoke and the bad, wrap around them winding up my arms. Sooner or later they’ll fully encase me.
I’m falling
“The higher you climb, the further you have to fall” is what comes to mind, I’m still falling. He’s all around me now and I can’t grab on, I can’t hold him like I want to, I can’t run my fingers through his hair like I know he loves. I’ve climbed so high with him or I guess he pulled me up, not unwillingly mind you.
I’m falling
falling is timeless, I could have been here for mere minutes, days, months, who knows. Only me. Nobody knows. I’m not sure what he does or how but He knows. Somehow. It’s still hard to think that he could keep me high if he knew what was going on inside my head. But I know he can, he knows he can.
That powerful theme continues along rather neatly here in this one as the situation seems to only get worse. Its a very powerful way of showing this here, which really couples well with the idea of what seems to be the good things in this character's life all turning into much more negative things.
I’m falling
the cracks are showing, in the walls surrounding me, the ones that hug me so tight its suffocating. Light streams in through those small cracks and as cliché as it sounds it can only be because of one person.
I’m falling
slowly but surely they’re dropping
I’m falling
it will take time, but we have nothing but time
I’m falling
Falling falling falling, but
now I’m falling to my favourite place.
Aaand well that seemed to escalate quite nicely there to end things. I love how the word falling which was previous echoing ever so often among the thoughts ends up increasing in frequency there until its all that's left as if this downward spiral into negative emotion ends up with his mind being simply overwhelmed by the feeling of falling into negativity. Its a pretty neat ending.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall:
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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