I wrote these for fun as an addition or following to "love the scenario" one of my previous posts in the Other Poetry forum. 
# 1 "The others"
Shoot, when, how, her?
There are guys all around her!
She see me, that is good.
What a beauty!
Beauty in the silence
despite the noise of love.
You create it when you shoot
and it becomes a crime.
You meant to take her in the heart.
Instead, you blew up the guys around her.
#2 "circumstance"
Wheeling away;
Another comes by.
You talk and talk for hours
and you think she is the one.
However, she is gaining ground on you
with her blades,
You're on a board and it needs new bearings.
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The first one really confuses me.
But I do like the second one,
for some reason, since I'm not quite sure what you're getting at.
hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm . . . .. .. ??? Whats the point of this?
nice