This piece is beautiful! I enjoyed all the musical metaphors used in it, and I could feel the rhythm in my head as I read it. I’m not sure about the ending - it felt a bit abrupt, but considering it’s being phrased as a letter, this also sort of works with the style of the poem. Something else I think I should point out is that the line “great unfinished symphony” also appears in a song from the musical Hamilton. I don’t know if this was intentional or not, but that might be something to edit out if you don’t want a reader’s mind jumping to a different work when they read your writing. Overall I really enjoyed the poem and the imagery you used.
Points: 369
Reviews: 8
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