Do We Remember Our Wishes?

Hello, Brittany here to do a review. I liked your poem, except for a tiny few changes need to be made. I for one, am not used to the writing being on the opposite side so it kind of brain freezed me for a moment and I didn't know exactly what I was reading. Also you need more punctuation for the pauses, other than that it is okay. Thanks for the reading. Have a good night and happy writing!

I like this. I kind of got a headache from the formatting for some reason, but this is a decent poem. My only problem is that I felt that you should have had more punctuation, because it was hard to know where to pause; for example, I would put "Only one winter has passed us - Will the beginning come for us now? If the long road sings us to sleep[[,]] Tell me about dreams, My dearest[[;]] Tell me about dreams."

This really is a nice poem. It feels gentle and soporific, almost, like a quiet, pondering thought that means a lot but comes off as simplistic in its approach. It's simple, but it's good for that very reason.



And as a side-note, welcome to the site! Hope to see more of your works soon.

This is purely wonderful use of a simplistic but meaningful
approach.

I love the emphasis at the end of each stanza.
" Please don't fall away
My dearest,
Please don't fall away. "

You compare some things that are unlike each other.
I feell that this is both sonething that makes it unique but also a bit confuzing.