The Altar

Okay. This was not at all what I expected after reading the description and I have to tell you I was disappointed but then it happens all the time.
This doesn't look like a poem but more like the random spilling of ideas at one place. Now, I'll have to tell you that my last poem uploaded was kind of like this so I can give you some ideas about it. It's looking more like a prose with line breaks in random places than an organised poem and that is the most curable ailment. So I'll tell you what I'd do.
Sit with this piece of work again and keeping this as a guideline or more like an idea diary attempt the poem again and I assure you, you'll get better results. Keep doing that until you are satisfied because you have to keep in mind one thing that good poems are not meant to be written over a span of fifteen minutes on a whim. So if your attempt is like that, you'll have to work harder.
I like the idea here but the execution was very poor and the thing with this type of poems are that they've been written already so your theme has a very low chance that its being written for the first time. So its a bit difficult to keep the reader engrossed but what you lose in that you have to make it up by your writing style.
Try again or start afresh but keep writing. That's the main thing. Sugar is sweeter after eating a chili. So go for it. Hit me if you have any further doubts.

I am sorry if my review will be somewhat offensive, as I tend to give one with full honesty.

Based on the description of the poem that I have read, it really seemed to be a piece with interesting idea. In fact, it was the description that made me read this poem, and I checked its title with a flash of time.

About the content of the poem, I had several problems with it. One, the content turned out to be cliche, and it ruined my reading mood slightly. Poem, or any kind of piece, on that matter, was common on portraying story about the bride being left by the bridegroom during the wedding day, to the point where the redundancy of the idea became boring to read. However, I kept reading with the hope that while the content was cliche, the way of its delivering was not. Eventually, my hoped was crushed, since I read how you lied down the sentences one by one, and the words one by one. It was an emotional speech, but it used the daily format of conversational speech. Not only it was common, it was used to deliver a cliche content. Lastly, there were some grammatical errors in it but it did not ruin it.

To sum it up, I wish you can create a new, or less cliche content, which could reflect the theme you intend to focus on. Also, I am hoping you can improve on how you deliver the emotional speech - make it vaguer, make it full with metaphors, etc. etc. That is all.

The idea of choosing a romantic one is really an attracting point in the poem .The style of writing is appreciable and the writer had put a good time for writing the poem the ending lines has a different impact on this poem even though I am not a perfect writer to command and point out the mistakes in the poem I would like to say that you had put some effort in writing this poem the ending has a positive impact in this poem and among the few poem which I went through this is a notable one
The execution the poem is the main loving factor of all readers and the presentation of title is also a notable point while reading this poem .The poem has various attracting factor which provoke every reader to completely read this poem also the execution of simple and understandable words are good qualities of the writer and the character of the writer is shown in this poem .I am assuming that you are a good writer who wants to do things differently I hope you will be a better writer in future.