Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Kate and I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression
Well this is a heartbreaking little tale of a man who is quite broken and left feeling empty and dead it would seem, just waiting for the day he can return to the movement he still had some joy in his life.
Anyway let's get right to: Kate's Line by Line Reactions;
The cold winds of the north swept through the forest, it traveled through the lushes trees and the beautiful red and blue flowers. The wind traveled like a snake; smooth and cleanly through the forest where it arrived in a mansion, the mansion tall, but broken from age and improper maintenance. Inside the wind twirled the dust in the ground then it moved from room to room until it hit the sleeping old Benji in the face.
Benji awoke from his deep slumber opened his eyes and looked around. The room to him felt so know and unknown at the same time. He inhaled the cold frigid air slowly then he exhaled it out the same way. With every breath he felt his life waning.
Well this is quite the start here. That title leaves nothing to the imagination and here with this opening it really doubles down on it showcasing the kind of situation Benji is in and how his body is slowly failing in this moment. I think that's a wonderful way to showcase it.
Benji slowly moved his old and frail body, with every motion his body cracked. Popping sound's filled the room as he got up from the bed and stood bent. Benji while touching his back with his hand went into the hallway. shattered glasses, chipped wood and random pools of mud made up the floor of the hallway, Benji walked on them barefooted he made no sound as his numb feet came in contact with the floor.
As Benji entered the kitchen he paid no heed to the red blood that trailed behind him. Benji found a half eaten loaf of bread with a packet of cream cheese in the one of the old cabinets. As he laid the cream in the outer layer of the bread with his finger, he reminiscent about the old times when the kitchen was filled with maids and servants, he remembered as they moved around like dry leaf's blown by the wind.
Oh dear, well this picture just gets worse and worse. I've seen many stories on here about the last day of a life well lived and this feels like the exact opposite here, the story of a life fallen apart, deep into ruin and to a point where Benji is just lost in his old memories going about the day not caring about the the injuries happening to him navigating this broken old house.
After finishing his meal Benji ventured into the garden, where it was filled with flowers and trees that have died from inappropriate care. The flowers reminded him of his wife, once bright and lovely now robbed of its color. He imagined what expression she was making, was it a sad one or one of happiness. He imagined his wife outside giving orders to the maids with a expression that would even make him scared. Everything felt empty as Benji ventured further, until he was standing besides his wife's grave. While kneeling he ran his wrinkly finger through the tombstone as it read 'Allena Vet Benji'.
Well that one helps explain a little bit about how much ruin has come here. Looks like the old man has slowly just lost the will to live here after what happened to the wife and it seems just everything has fully spiraled out of control having started out there.
He knelt there even when the rains cascaded from the sky, the sounds of the rain and the lightning became a backdrop to his mind as he sat there, waiting for something.
Soon night started to rule as Benji got up and heeded back to the mansion. He followed back the bloodied path to his room where he fell asleep again.
The rays of the sun peeked through the tears in the curtain. The rays fell onto his face, but no response, no reaction came from him. He had already now met with his wife.
AHhh well I think it managed to take the smallest of turns towards just a little bit wholesome right at the very end there as we have him remember the time he had joy in his life and he finally, finally seems to have been able to reach it once more.
Aaand that's it for this oneee!!!
Overall
Overall a heartbreaking little tale of a poor old man at the end of his life, just waiting for things to end, everything just fully fallen apart there. I think the description is incredibly and the emotion it drives up in such a short time is incredibly powerful.
As always remember to: Take what you think was helpful and forget the rest!
Kate
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