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Yes it is a train of thought! Or more or less how I see writer's block when I personally have it...
-The Written Chef
... I love this. The only thing I would say is to make it more clear that it's a train of thought... is it? haha, sorry I don't even know. But I like how it flows.
Hello there, Chef! I'm SporkPunk, and I'll review this today.
I think this piece is really unique, and the alternating lines were clever. I know a lot of us have been there with Writer's Block, and this is the only poem I've seen directly addressing it. Which is really good. Unfortunately, I don't have any nitpicks, because this poem is really good.
Keep Writing!
--Sporks
Very good. I enjoyed your interpretative poem. The Harry Potter addition was slightly humorous as it appeared to have originated randomly. The title itself, To You, Writer's Block is very appealing on numerous grounds. On one hand, it sounds like a proposal to discuss writer's block, on the other it sounds like waiter offering an example of writer's block for you to 'taste'. I believe this piece leans toward the latter and the Harry Potter reference would exemplify the nature of writer's block to wander off task. Perhaps this review is too psychological in terms of interpretation but your first line encapsulates key aspects of writer's block.
Fatigue is radiating throughout as "he" tries to focus.
Essentially this is the feeling one gets after breaking the metaphorical wall. A sense of euphoria and thrill to have made progress. Ultimately a very interesting piece with more than one interpretation. Keep on writing.
Sincerely,
Elitehusky
Thank You Moriah for a thoughtful critique!
I am glad that I can change your mind about poetry once more, but really...I am no fan of it either. I wrote this on behalf of delayed thoughts lolz. It was sort of like a 'I hate you, Writer's Block!' type of ordeal. Anyways, you were right in figuring out how I alternated the lines. I wanted it to seem like a start and re-start type of poem to convey how I feel when I get writer's block. The three dots at the ends of the few lines represents the loss of track of mind. Thus, picking up on the finish for the line after the main part of the poem.
As to your critique, let me explain!
Poem:
A boy is at home trying desperately to write something down. Some thought or whatever. He has before him a piece of computer paper and not lined, thus making it easier for him to wonder off. Since I had troubles as a teen with bullies, I wanted to add a since of 'slap in the face' relief. Thus, I added the bully outside his window and added a bully maneauver such as throwing something at your window. The other lines, like the harry potter and balance ones; are just random thoughts keeping the boy from staying on a one track idea. Thus, keeping his Writer's Block stirring.
The bully doesn't nessacarily have to be in it, but I wanted someone to throw a brick into his window. That way when I mentioned the 'block with two words less than a prick landing near his thoughts,' it would resemble a "block saying 'Writer's Block' " Which is ultimate irony at best and kinda funny I think!
But it wouldn't be a poem if I out right told you what the words were and if I ment that statement literally or not!
*Thank you for your wisdom Moriah
-The Written Chef
Hello! I will be reviewing your poetry today. I want to start off by saying that I hate poetry, so the fact that I not only read your poem but actually enjoyed parts of it, is saying something.
I think my favorite line was
It is just an interesting thought to ponder.
The structure of the poem was a little confusing and I am still not certain that I have quite figured it out, but I think you are alternating lines, so that one sentence goes with the words that are italicized. Am I right?
But my real critique is for this one line:
It just doesn't fit. What does this have to do with writer's block? Is it a metaphor? Is there some other metaphor you could use to better convey your thoughts?
I doubt this helped, but if it did than consider yourself extremely blessed. Keep writing, you're obviously talented!