Published October 8, 2010
You know that moment when you fall out of doubt because your mind sucker just absorbed up all. I do. It just now happened to me this very moment
I was happy, she knows me like I know her
I was scared cause it’s freaky, you know, like mind suckers are
But all in all I appreciate her mind, as she sucked most of it from me
and I am egotistical after all
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Okay, so simply and quickly, this poem is a bit awkward to me. There's not really very much poetic about it...just about an abstract story. A mind-sucker sucks your mind. And that's it. Try adding imagery or metaphors or something...
You'll notice I edited spacing and entering and punctuation and stuff, so try to incorporate that.
-Lumiface