I state. She said.

The fat cat on the mat snoozes, as I state
.I didn’t know forks could get bruises.
So my spindles and tongs which delve into my fish finger
Have not yet bruised the fork.
.But this is a time of happiness. She said
Yum.

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KAH
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KAH wrote a review · Fri May 14, 2010 12:43 am

I don't understand the poem very well! But it was good at the same time! It doesn't teally mean anything to me, but some how I still adore this poem! I like how at the end is says "Yum." The title is a little bit random and doesn't really lure me into reading it. Keep writing!

-KAH :D

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eldEr
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eldEr wrote a review · Thu May 13, 2010 2:24 pm

Okay...so this was sort of a pointless poem, but I loved it! I agree with stelagineva, the

TheUnkownPoet wrote: .I didn’t know forks could get bruises


part was my favorite! Although I don't see why you have periods at the beginning of two of the lines... Is it just for spacing?
Anyways...
It made me giggle. Good job.

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Hecate
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Hecate wrote a review · Thu May 13, 2010 12:58 pm

I'm not really sure how to critique this properly, but I just wanted to say that I absolutely loved it, and I don't really know what you mean by:

TheUnknownPoet wrote:.I didn’t know forks could get bruises


But I love it. I don't know why. You personified a fork.
I have no criticism to offer, because I honestly don't understand it that well, but I absolutely love it, anyway! So good job!



People say I love you all the time - when they say, ‘take an umbrella, it’s raining,’ or ‘hurry back,’ or even ‘watch out, you’ll break your neck.’ There are hundreds of ways of wording it - you just have to listen for it, my dear.
— John Patrick, The Curious Savage