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She Was a Girl

     She was a girl who said she was everything. She said she could do anything she wanted to. She said her eyes held the stars, her hands the sun and moon, and her voice the fate of lives.

     She said she could read our future with her small deck of cards. She'd lay them out one by one on the table before us, and told us to hold our palms out. She said she couldn't tell us what might happen, but that she could warn us of what we could expect.

     When we asked her what she meant and who she might be, she laughed and shook her head and said she was many things. She said she was a poet, a musician, a writer, and if we listed more things, she'd say she was all of the above.

     And she was a girl who was as simple as the rest of us. Yet, she gave herself so many titles so she could feel special. She said she liked to read, but didn't want to leave it at that. So she wrote stories, designed worlds, so she could be different. At the time, I didn't understand what she meant, what she was on about. I was just as confused as the next girl over when we listened to her rant.

     She had said she could bring people together with a guitar and piano. She said a song was all we needed to let the world know that we were human. She was human. But we all laughed in her face. How can someone so different create a better world for us to live in?

     But then came the titles. If you weren't something, then you were nothing. People began to look towards her because she was everything. And then we started to worry. She was ten steps ahead. We couldn't catch up.

     And now I get it, because one day she stopped me. She took my hand, grabbed my arm, and that's when she told me, "I was a girl once. I wanted to be everything. But I don't have eyes like the stars, and my hands have gone weak.

     "All I have is my deck of cards, but I'm not all of the above. You know, girls grow up to be women. And you were a girl once."

     Right. I must've forgotten. She's not the only one. But she was different. She was a girl who said she was everything. She said her eyes held the stars, her hands the sun and moon and that she could read your future with her small deck of cards that always sat on the right hand side of the table.

     She was a girl who said she was everything. And everything is what I wanted to be.

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Tikaya
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Tikaya wrote a review · Mon Dec 15, 2025 8:39 pm

Ok idk why but I’m struggling with long-form text today, so I am back for a review for you 😊

I like the way you say this: “her eyes held the stars, her hands the sun and moon“ It’s just v poetic :3

Also really like this: “if we listed more things, she'd say she was all of the above.”

Is such a girl really “as simple as the rest of us”? She seems pretty extra and confident to me :3 Oh or is this how she views herself. That she feels unremarkable and just says all these things? Basically faking being confident and loud? I rly like that she uses her creativity to make herself feel special.

I feel like this part: “what she was on about”, doesn’t quite mesh with the rest of the paragraph, feels too… colloquial. Nonchalant?

Hm I wonder if this doesn’t contradict the statement that she was as simple as the rest of us: “How can someone so different “ Otherwise, mb you can be simple but still different?

Wait wait wait you are losing me. Then came the titles? I thought she gave them to herself and they found that funny and not worth worrying abt?
“She was ten steps ahead. We couldn't catch up.“ Is this rly such a bad thing? Clearly the others didn’t make the effort as she did so this seems an obvious outcome?

So… is this abt how as children, we can become everything we want but as adults it comes all crashing down? She says that her hands are weak now and she never had (doesn’t have anymore) the stars in her eyes? That feels so… disillusioning ☹ ☹

But the last line is rly hopeful again. Bc it feels like the narrator thinks abt picking up where the girl has left off, being the next one to chase this illusive “everything”! Rly like the ending here 😊

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EEEEEPOETRY
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i LOVE the structure of this poem. while i know it's not uncommon for this structure, it still feels comforting in a way for it's simplicity. it also helps the story along and gives it a clear ending. speaking of the ending, it reminds me a lot about the ending of the slam poetry, I Want to Be by Maia Mayor and the ending of that poem was just so powerful! i enjoy the story nature of spoken poetry, and i enjoy the story you told. it kind of encases a bit of mystery and shows how growing up can impact others opinions. my favorite part is probably the sixth stanza/paragraph and the ending. overall, great poem and i always enjoy yours!

Ahhhh! Thank you so much! This is one of my favorite poems, mostly because it's written about myself. I did a little interview on some close friends and family and put everything they said into a poem like this.

I'm so glad you liked it though. I'm glad you like my poems, it's not common for someone to read through what I have. Most of my poems are emotional or have a story and it's "too much effort" to "decode". But I do appreciate your reviews.

I hope you have a wonderful day/night! If you haven't already, another poem I wrote similar to this one is "I Knew a Boy". It's under the same folder in my portfolio!

Yours truly,
~ Taost

yayy ok ill look at it soon



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