Spread your cloud wisp wingtips with me,
and we’ll draw sky curtains together,
following drifting parachutes
weighed by raindrops and regret.
Let’s spend the afternoon
matching torn-up lithographs,
and we’ll leave stardust tracks,
where ghosts of lovers past have waltzed together.
We’ll dance in the space between light and dark,
brushed by asbestos snowflakes
but we can hide beneath your parasol,
eyes lit with cinnamon sunlight.
Let’s spend the afternoon
matching torn-up lithographs,
and we’ll leave stardust tracks,
where ghosts of lovers past have waltzed together.
Let me be your fallen star,
‘cause we can kick dust devils
with our sneaker prints
and shake the dust from stairs as we race by.
Let’s spend the afternoon
matching torn-up lithographs,
and we’ll leave stardust tracks,
where ghosts of lovers past have waltzed together.
There’s a place hidden in porch light
where you can clearly see the way the cracks
flood with rain that never goes away.
Let’s spend the afternoon
matching torn-up lithographs,
and we’ll leave stardust tracks,
where ghosts of lovers past have waltzed together.
Let’s spend the afternoon
matching torn-up lithographs.
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Hi! What lovely lyrics!!
I absolutely loved this... I can totally hear a melody and everything!! I don't really have anything bad to say about it. I like the chorus the most!
Good luck, these are fabulous!
--mcbeff
Hi! What lovely lyrics!!
I absolutely loved this... I can totally hear a melody and everything!! I don't really have anything bad to say about it. I like the chorus the most!
Good luck, these are fabulous!
--mcbeff
Hey there! I'm going to review your lovely lyrics today.
As you can probably tell, I love this piece! The only teeny problem I can find is this:
You were talking about this (pretty!) place where you could see rainwater in the cracks, but suddenly you talk about something else. I think you should expand this verse, but don't change it if it would affect the dreaminess of this piece.
All in all, a delicate and dreamy piece! Keep up the good work!
-Rosie =]