Hi there, Rain!
I liked this. It's simple, but it conveys your point very well. Your use of imagery really spices things up, too.
The things that I'm going to critique are probably going to be small things, as this really doesn't have many problems with it.
Your grammar is one of the first things I noticed about this. In poetry, you still need to have complete sentences (sometimes, but more on that later).
The first stanza is a fragment. Here is how I would suggest writing it to make grammatical sense.
The silent man stands
against the wall,
his eyes a dark
and misty gray.
That makes grammatical sense. I took out the comma after eyes because the pause wasn't doing it for me.
round him,
like a worm,
in rain.
There are several things here that need addressing.
1. "round him" doesn't make sense. You need to say "around" or put an apostrophe before round to indicate the omission of the syllable.
2. the comma after worm isn't doing it for me; the pause makes a stop so I think the simile is over, but it's not. omit the comma.
This is a matter of opinion, but I think you should change it to "worms /in rain" because parties seem like multiple things rather than one thing (the really crazy ones, anyway)
He does not dance,
or shake, or twist
Instead of these two lines, you should find something to say that emphasizes the last three lines of the poem. It doesn't quite do that, in my perspective, and I think you could find some imagery that really makes it stronger there. The rest of the poem has such lovely imagery, and this part falls flat.
This is a really nice, simple poem. Good going. I hope that this review was helpful to you. Happy writing!
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