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Are you SURE you're only 10? When I was 10, I was probably plagiarizing all of my school reports =P
I don't really have anything constructive to say, so you may consider this review a waste of time. I just wanted to say that I enjoyed reading this. Actually, no. I wanted to say 'You are TRULY Ignis' sister'. Then I thought again and decided that that *may* be taken offensively.
Either way, you are a great writer, so keep on writing!
~Sensei
OMG well done well done. Have to say i never could write that good at your age but keep it up and you'll be an even greater writer when you're older ^^ Have to say i can't find anything wrong with it at the moment but once i have more time i'll read it even closer XD have to say i'm curious about the painting and hope to read more! Keep up the good work
Soulkana<3
Oh, very interesting.
I think you could become a great author once your older, you're already very good. 
Hello, TheSilverLining! Your only ten? I could never write that well when I was ten.
This is a very unique and intruiging story so far. I can't wait for the second chapter! I like the mystery at the end
Very interesting. And what's with the painting?! I was not expecting that. Kathren seems mature for her age - I like that but wouldn't her older brother, Jordan, be more mature then her?
Anyway, this is great start and I look forward to reading more of your writings.
~DeadEnds