Heyo~
Ok so what we've got here is great imagery and things that sound so beautiful and poetic that my heart is breaking a little.
Also I have no idea what this poem is really about. It's about a relationship? Probably? But I'm not really sure because it's listed under satire.
Here's what I got from it:
First stanza: The narrator and Other fall from Eden (I would suggest changing "from here to Eden" to "from Eden to here" if they are indeed falling because it would create a stronger sense of direction).
Second stanza:
Is the lavender really lavender or is it metaphorical? It doesn't seem like a fall from Eden would be followed by something so beautiful but eh. Maybe they're going to Eden but it's tarnished because this is after the fall? Unsure. This stanza is a little tangent-y with the farmer. Unless I'm missing the point completely, which I could be.
Third stanza:
We're back at the car but not? The narrator is keeping something from the Other? Though it's within the thing that isn't happening? Then there's a boy throwing stones. And what did you wait a day for?
It starts out all right with the biblical reference, but then it is confusing. It's beautiful, but I think you're trying to get a point across that you're not. Unless that's the point. Unless this is satire because you want me to analyze it and really it's nothing. >.>
I hope that this rambling review proves useful to you somehow. Happy review day!
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