Published September 22, 2024
Have You Heard the Sea?
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Have you ever heard the ocean sigh?
or the swaying Tree’s moan?
Do the birds chitter, or chatter?
Perhaps they only cry,
Long; mournful;
Or shrill and high.
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Did you know there was thunder in the waves?
Have you heard the wind flap?
Or the perpetual rain’s,
pelting clap?
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No?
Stop.
Stop that;
Put it down.
listen to the whispers,
stop and hear the sounds
Don’t pass by the ancient wisdom all around.
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Hii. After reading this poem I thought I'd leave a quick review!
Although the meaning you intended stayed a bit unclear for me I still like this poem. It's comforting in its way almost like all the poems I was read to as child. It almost feels nostalgic. It's beautiful.
I absolutely love this part and made me stop for a second to think about why it was put there. I'm still not sure but for me it just reflects over thinking in its way. After questioning the noises the things were all so familiar with make you get dropped back into reality. Perhaps it was intended to mean something else or perhaps the meaning varies between the readers.
Nonetheless it's a very fragile poem in a beautiful way. And you can enjoy it even without getting too deep into the meaning behind it. Keep writing!
Top of the morning to you! I hope it's been even half as great as this poem.
I'm always partial to poetry that rhymes, and though you don't feature a consistent scheme, you still lend a fun, sweet rhythm to the piece. It reminded me of something out of a children's book- uplifting, but with sophisticated messaging- you clearly put a lot of thought into it.
The final stanza is particularly striking. The first two are pretty general, the addressee could be anybody, but the-
-sees the speaker turn toward you. The sudden drop in pace emphasizes that section beautifully, setting it apart from everything else.
I wasn't initially a fan of the line, "Do the birds chitter, or chatter?" on my first read through, but found it grew on me during my second. There's not really a discernable difference between the two; it's just the phrase "chitter-chatter" spliced in two. It doesn't tell the reader anything.
However, taking the last stanza into consideration -> "There is meaning in what we perceive as background noise, if only you listen for it," I, the reader's, initial frustration at a seemingly senseless question such as "Chitter vs chatter?" only furthers your point.
I hope that made sense, (and that I'm not reading too far into it, lol) but one way or another, I thought it cool how a line I overlooked on my first pass through held meaning for me on my second. (And that's not even touching on just how good the personification is in this piece.)
All this to say, amazing poem, and have a great rest of your day!
I'm just going to be honest and say that I'm bored out of my mind and I just randomly clicked on something
I also don't particularly feel like writing a super long review.
other than that, yeah, it is short. but not too short.
I'm gonna review by paragraph
hmm-, no, I've never thought about that. I have also never paired trees with the ocean. Are we talking about a beach? the scenery in my mind changes with that motion... can I have a coconut? (just joking haha)
when I hear chitter and chatter I think of squirrels, not birds. When I hear twitch, tweak, chirp, and shrill, now I think of birds. using "chitter" and "chatter" seems interesting to me, nonetheless. maybe not cry. they chirp demanding questions, if you listen closely.
"So? are you going to go? Hm?" seems more bird like than "Are you going to go?" and its hard to explain, but I think what I'm trying to get at is they are more demanding of an answer.
I have always been terrified of the waves. I love water, but not in large quantities and in movement. I like swimming in the deep end of the pool but water draining kind of scares of me. So I kind of don't like the middle paragraph, but that's just me. large, crashing waves just scare me. but who knows, maybe, if we listen closely, the ocean might just be trying to tell us something.
I'm sorry if this didn't seem much like a review. Have a good day!