Published February 17, 2011
Flutter slash
flutter slash
knock it off -
warped patterns lose
their flawed continuity.
Softly jagged points of elongation needlessly prolong
extraneous figments laminar and thin;
the skinny skydiver what used to eat our spew
for spitting air back out during sunbaths.
And the final fall beneath
my foot - a dry crunch
like crackers between teeth,
the bone beneath fists,
a leaf in the mist.
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I'm trying to figure out what this is about but the answer alludes me, maybe because I am tired.
I quite like this poem, I like that shape and the flow of it. I'm really tired so i might come back and give you a better review later on. Sorry But good work anyway!