i don't get this.
this brought no emotional catharsis to me. this is generic and beaten to a bloody pulp. you talk about the girl who fake smiles, who has a bully, who has fake friends, and who has a boy that doesn't like her. when is it something we haven't seen before? the last line makes no sense, even with the silly emphasis you put on never. it doesn't hit any sweet spots with me, it is just insanely underwhelming. if i could suggest anything, it would be to try to shine it under a different light. bring something new and refreshing. if not, you get poetry like this. don't try to have sometthing bland, have something that varies.
thanks.
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