Published August 25, 2010
Let go of my confusion
Clear my head of all delusion
finally see the truth
A burning need to see
Everything I'm meant to be
Life with this pain
Free to be me
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Hi, I am kind of new at writing poems as well but I like the flow of it , however I think you could always expand your concept more. Keep it up
This is a nice poem, and I get what you're saying.
A good thing to start doing is to put at least some punctuation in your poems. This makes the poem easier to read and it sounds better when it's clearer. With this poem, it's not the really long kind, so I don't necessarily need punctuation to read and understand it.
Good work with this poem! Also, I'm from Ohio, too. And welcome to YWS!