Published June 16, 2010
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i could really connect with this poem, and as i was reading it the more i was drawn into it. It's more of a song then a poem, but nonetheless still very nicely written. I hope to read more of your writing.
I like this poem. Granted it seems to be lyrics to a songs I rather enjoy it. I have felt that desire, that, and longing to have someone, to hold them, to love them. I guess that is why this poem is so great to me because I can really connect with it. i probably overlooked a few things, but I do not care because this poem is great as it is. Good job.
Heya. I'm not very convinced. Now, I know this wasn't exactly a springtime poem, but if it is so yearning, then rather make it 3rd person, because yearning is usually inner and hidden.
Hope that helped,
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