Hi. This is Kman134. i'm here to review your work.
I enjoyed the elements of death and sadness that was in this poem. this kind of symbolism makes me think about how short life is and how everyone we love will die in the end. I'm aware that sounds a little nihilistic and depressing, but that is the truth in certain cases. the vocabulary is very well done and nicely formed, and the emotional tone was somber and serene.
the rhyming scheme in the first few stanzas was well established, but then it shifts to free verse in the next one. while i'm all for creative writing, it is best if you stuck with the rhyming to put it in sync. if not, then it won't be able to flow correctly and it would be a little off.
Anyways, this was a pretty good poem. i hope to read more.
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