"I open my book
I see light,
I open my book
I’m free,
I open my book
I’m comfortable,
I open my book
I travel to places,
I open my book
I expand my knowledge I learn things,
I open my book
I’m grateful I can see, I can feel, I can hear,
I open my book
I love myself and my life,
I open my book
I have faith I believe,
I open my book
I have so much more to say about it,
That’s what happens when I open my book.
What about you?"
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Nice piece of writing by you but the only thing which is not suiting it is repetition of sentence
"I open my book "
Rathet you can write it only in the beginning and at the ending as it would sound more interesting then . Otherwise its really wonderful penning as anyone xan relate to. We all have gone through books and experienced what all you have written. Wish to read mote nicely carved poetry from you. Blessings always.
Nice piece of writing by you but the only thing which is not suiting it is repetition of sentence
"I open my book "
Rathet you can write it only in the beginning and at the ending as it would sound more interesting then . Otherwise its really wonderful penning as anyone xan relate to. We all have gone through books and experienced what all you have written. Wish to read mote nicely carved poetry from you. Blessings always.
Yolo peps!!!! LadyRanicorn here for another amazing review!!!!!! Wow, I'm really starting to form an interest in poems aren't I??XD Now on to the review!!!! First off, what ever you do, don't repeat the same thing over and over again but in the next stanza. Only repeat a couple of times and that'll make the poem in question sound a whole lot better. For me that was the only confusing part about this poem, so next time try to slow down and describe more in depth about your feelings and that'll help you a lot during your road to success in poetry writing. You can ignore all of this if you want, I don't know much about poetry writing, but I do hope that this review will help you in the future. Anyway, until next time, LadyRanicorn out!!!!!!
Hello, Ivywater here for a review.
This is an amazing poem, one I can really relate to. I love how simple it feels (at least to me), and your use of repetition is amazing. That being said there is something I would change, but nothing that major.
I would make this into two separate lines...
But that may just be me...
That's really all tat I would change, so.....great job!