I look at you with Loving eyes,
You look back with Hurtful Goodbyes,
I try to please you and make things right,
So we live in a Happy Bright light,
So please try and forgive me,
Forget about him, her, he or she,
Think about something else,
Not about how you felt.
If you leave me behind and run away,
I shall stalk you there and go to pray,
You might even try to escape,
But I will follow in every form or shape,
You can try and push the troubles to separate,
But your end will be my fate,
So don’t try and just give up rest?
And we can agree on who’s the best.
Don’t bring up the subject again,
As all you are are just worthless men,
People to throw and catch,
To which you find your perfect match,
Whether you like her or whether you disagree,
You will marry or face me,
As you don’t have a choice or say,
Of what should be done or may.
This is a Woman’s Land,
For a Man to lend a hand,
You are not in charge or above,
In crisis or in Love.
The woman holds the house and you,
All of the other men too,
You are there at our call,
You shall jump and you shall fall,
We must cue you when we say,
And you must obey,
This is life as we know it,
And you must live in shit,
You want things to change for good?
Go and rebel and do what you would,
But remember that this is Modern day,
Where Women usually don’t have a say.
So men around the world and beyond,
If you dare to do anything wrong,
We shall join in forces and go,
For you heads and bodies and whatever are so.
Men do fret as we do need some freedom,
You need to move and let us come,
We shall come in thousands and more,
To finally open the door,
To our life.
I think that this is the best poem I have ever read that is related t women! I love how it flowed and rhymed! I don't think I have anything bad about this poem at all! I even had a couple of my friends and my boyfriend read this poem! I sent it to a few of my friends too (making sure to give credit to you) This is honestly the best piece I have heard in a while!
It rhymed and flowed all too well. It had a feeling of passion. The sound, and the imagery gave off utter beauty. It was a little too deep but i can relate to this poem because i just got out of a bad relationship that made me feel a little bitter towards men. This beautiful poem defines feminism.
ah.. Feminism. You scare me. you scare me a little. I enjoyed reading, but you scare me. I don't think this is unacceptable or so, but it has some kind of a ... negativity towards men. I mean... whatever I did wrong? :s
I'm saying this with humor (risky).
Everyone can't be the same. so if you are in love with a foolish men - that's the one you must deal with. And also the line "we shall come in thousands an more" - feels like a terrorism or something
Writing is brilliant. Rhymes are quite brilliant, and we feel the energy.
I have to say this is a vary interesting pice.
At the beginning I thought I'd have pity for the speaker after reading this. In the middle I didn't like the speaker, she sounded cruel and mean. At the end I understood. And now I sorta agree with her.
I think you did quite good job with this poem. I think the fact that my opinion on the speaker changed through the pice added something to it that you just wouldn't have been able to add any other way. and because of that I do think I wont forget this poem for quite a long time.
Good job, I cant wait to see more from you!