Hi tempted! (I can call you that right?)
This is Pink, I'll be reviewing this piece for you today.
But first, Welcome to YWS! I see you're new and I hope you enjoy this site as much as the rest of us YWSers. (totally just made that up)
So I only have a two nitpicks right now

Blake and Sydney were at Blake’s house setting up for the party

You can just say: Sydney was at Blake's house. Because we already know she wouldn't be at his house if Blake wasn't there, right?

Do I even know that man people?”

many people?

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Okay, well first of all, beautiful introduction. Captured my interest right away and I could tell I was going to get into some really awesome adventure/action.
I like your writing style and you have pretty good grammar, I only spotted a few things, which is good.
One thing I want to point out is your pace, it seems slow at this point. Try speeding a few things up. This was a pretty long chapter and it seemed that all she really did was wake up and plan a birthday party. There was a lot of unneeded dialogue and it became a bit draggy in some parts, that said,it could steer people away from reading this. Based on your introduction, I think this is going to be pretty interesting so I'll watch out for your stories and maybe you could PM me when you write more. Just work on your pace and flow, if you have any questions, feel free to PM me. I'll be happy to help.
Continue writing!

~Pink