My apologise if this isn't set out right im pretty new still to poetry so bare with me please.
She sits in a corner bloody and bruised
Thinking of how life should have been
She should have been happy
With a family who loved her
But instead she’s stuck with an abusive father
A hole of a house
And a rat named spike
She had to get out
She’d hitch a ride
She waved it down
Jumping in
They drove for ages
Then they stoped
And with one swift move
He pinned her down
He took her innocents
Her dignity
Then with one quick jab he ended it all
Leaving her to bleed by the side of the road
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She sits in a corner bloody and bruised Bloodied might sound better here. Also this is a good place for some imagery.
Thinking of how life should have been
She should have been happy To keep with the present tense, should this say "she should be happy"?
With a family who loved her
But instead she’s stuck with an abusive father
A hole of a house
And a rat named spike Capital S for a name
She had to get out
She’d hitch a ride
She waved it down This part confused me slightly-you said she would, and all of sudden, oh, she has. Like we've missed a part of the story. Maybe make this a new staza?
Jumping in
They drove for ages
Then they stoped Stopped
And with one swift move
He pinned her down
He took her innocents Innocence, not innocents
Her dignity
Then with one quick jab he ended it all A jab? That sounds pretty mild. It actually sounds like he gave her an injection...which left me confused as to what you meant.
Leaving her to bleed by the side of the road
More description needed overall, I think. Emotions, imagery, feeling. I think it is set out fine, though. A good start to something that could be better.