Published August 29, 2010
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I love the message to this. It is really beautiful!
My own problem is with the first stanza. It doesn't flow very well. Maybe rework words? I'm not sure. I'm sorry. But I just know it doesn't flow well.
Keep up the good work!
Jamie
i wrote this almost a year ago for my little sister Titly.....and I know whoever is reading this can dedicate it to some one they love too