Great Poem. I like the fact that the last word of each stanza is the beginning of another. Are you suggesting there is never an end to anything? Maybe not ... but cool insight, isn't it?
The rhythm was quite awkward to read at times; especially stanza ten:
Boy, I’d love revenge,
It’d certainly be nice,
Without a re-bel-lion,
I’d conquer Ingland-
It's mainly just the last two lines; it doesn't match the rhythm; unless you have you own way of reading it which I, and probably many other readers, are yet to be aware of this. If not, maybe you should reword it.
I'm not sure how you spell 'England', but it's definitely not with an 'I'
Overall, great poem (as I had stated before). Keep up making these strange yet highly amusing songs!
PS: Is this a review? Because if it is, this is my first ever! Yay! (I better get some points for this!)
PSS: I did get points! 50 in total! Yay XD ...
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