I'd make you my writing if only i could,
Dear to me no matter how good.
The happy ending of my huge strife,
the essential influence, the story of my life.
The blood from my pen tattoing the page,
The white body yellowing, maturing with age.
I'd erase your faults and highlight your beauty,
brand you with my name through sense of duty.
If my words were sophistication you'd be solid gold,
If popularity was love you'd be well told,
If letters were hope you'd inspire my story
words so flowing , my golden glory!
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I disagree about the rhyming. I didn't think it sounded forced at all. It seemed to flow to me. This is a well-written poem. Capitalize "i" in the first line! "Tattoo" has 2 o's, as shown. Check your work before you send it in. Otherwise, I thought your word choice was good. Keep up the good work.
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This is a good poem, although the rhyme for last line for every stanza seemed forced to me. The lines were too long.
And the third line of the third stanza:
You say "If popularity was love" and then "you'd be well told" what do you mean "well told"? how does that relate to "If popularity was love" it seemed like you said it only because it rhymed. NEVER EVER DO THAT! It is bad bad bad bad, and never ever ever try to make a word rhyme with something like orange. It's bad bad bad bad!!!!!!! OK my little rant is over now. Rhyming poems are not always my thing but this one was pretty good. Keep writing!