It sounds very 'generic' to me. No real uniqueness, no stand-out lines.
Sweetness wrote:Always i am here for you and will protect you if i can,
Never will you be alone or without your biggest fan.
Maybe alter this a little. Perhaps; "I am always here for you..."
Sweetness wrote:Just wrap your arms around me and never let me go,
Take me to our world and teach me how to grow.
Just a little thing but I think changing the 'our' to 'your' would help? So it would be; "Take me to your world and teach me how to grow."
Sweetness wrote:Look into my eyes and see all that is true,
know i'll stick by you know matter what you do,
To me, this seems a little awkward. The first line anyhow. Alter that as you wish.
Sweetness wrote:swim in the pools of hope and faith of what we share,
remember you're my baby boy and that i'll always care.
(spelling) I know it's no big deal. Just helps the reader.
Sweetness wrote:Champagne on a balcolny or fanta at Ash High
Forever is for now and not until we die,
but our love wont be forgotten if we drift apart,
your forever in my memory, forever in my heart.
I like these lines. :thumb:
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