I would love to enlist all the aspects in this poem line by line. For the first line , the contrast between the capabilities and present scenario of powerful gale is marvelous.My suggestion will be to use whispering instead of singing.Again in third line you amused me with contrast.The willingness of fire to accept this versatile change in line four, reminds me of the major revolutionary movements that took place all over the world.In sixth line instead of shiniest I would suggest glorious so that the overall impact is at its best.Seventh line was the key point that I used to relate to the first and third line.In eleventh and twelfth lines I was reminded that the hard work we do to achieve something extraordinary always has its toll.The next two lines also reminded me of the good time we get in reward for that hard work.I would suggest 'always'in between 'is' and 'an' in thirteenth line.Last two lines are the one which I loved the most.It conveys the most deep and thoughtful message to all.Overall I loved the poem.
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