"Hello" is a greeting, most certainly more than a word. It's power is grand and, oh, what a moving word.
"Hello" is a greeting, most certainly more than a word. It's the start of a speech, invitation, or conversation. Wow, what an amazing word.
"Hello" is a greeting, most certainly more than a word. Not only is it the new beginning of a wonderful and everlasting friendship, but it is the start of our one and only world.
*take time today to say a sweet "Hello" and make someone's day. Spread kindness to all and it will travel right back to you.
-Sunshine101
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Hey sunshine it's fallen coming at you with an awesome review:3 first off I love your repetition of the hello Is greeting, more than a word but giving different meanings very good :3 your last line though is my favorite
"Dman17tacos says....Nice work, it describes the power of a simple word we just randomly throw at people everyday without having second thoughts. I think this might be the first time or second I've heard anyone talking about the power of hello, but either way it's a word that is usually not considered anything, but a simple hello from a kind stranger or a good friend is enough to turn your day for the better. I like how even though most of us forget how that simple word can affect us, you didn't, you remembered and took those feelings and thoughts and brought them to pen and paper (erm....well keyboard and screen but you get what I mean). Something I got to say would be more useful in showing the message of the poem more would be some metaphors or personifications, like "Hello is the gate between our world and the world we could create" or "Hello is the joy of the bird as it is singing on a warm sunny Saturday morning". That way you have a sort of physical reference people have seen or experienced and can compare it with. Good work, cant wait to read more of your works"
agree with him.
Keep writing
~fallen
Hi there, Hadj here to review
Just a few things:
1) "It's power is grand and, oh, what a moving word"
The comma between and and oh is unnecessary
2) This might sound more poetic with some meter or rhyme, or if you don't want that, maybe an increase in poetic devices such as personification of the word "Hello" would work as well. I would also break it up into more lines so that it reads more smoothly.
3) I'm not sure what the "*" is for in the last stanza. Maybe instead you should use italics, or at least put a * at the start and finish of the stanza.
Other than that, nice work. There is a lot of voice used in this poem and I really like the subject
~Hadj
Nice work, it describes the power of a simple word we just randomly throw at people everyday without having second thoughts. I think this might be the first time or second I've heard anyone talking about the power of hello, but either way it's a word that is usually not considered anything, but a simple hello from a kind stranger or a good friend is enough to turn your day for the better. I like how even though most of us forget how that simple word can affect us, you didn't, you remembered and took those feelings and thoughts and brought them to pen and paper (erm....well keyboard and screen but you get what I mean). Something I got to say would be more useful in showing the message of the poem more would be some metaphors or personifications, like "Hello is the gate between our world and the world we could create" or "Hello is the joy of the bird as it is singing on a warm sunny Saturday morning". That way you have a sort of physical reference people have seen or experienced and can compare it with. Good work, cant wait to read more of your works