Published July 26, 2009
Why did you do that?
You have embedded that kiss on me forever.
Just like a tatto
and now I hate you.
Chourus
When you kissed me
you reminded me of before
what we had and what we lost.
and you've left me wanting more.
v2
But I really don't need you
the pain you gave me
and now you've gone and kissed me
and all my feelings have gone AWOL.
Chourus.
V3
but you know you can control my feelings
I'm like a puppet on strings
or just a hobby or a game you play when your bored
well not anymore!
Chours
When you kissed me
you reminded me of before
what we had and what we lost.
and you've left me wanting more.
But I'm not going to play ball
I'm not yours
you can't controll me any longer
so go find some other poor girls heart to break
coz' your ain't breaking mine.
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Hello, I guess it is my turn to critt this lyric. Just to let you know I am not into the type of lyrics you wrote so I am sorry if I hurt your feelings or emotions. I am expressing my self towards the lyric.
1. You do not have to tell us if something is chorus or a verse. Humans are not dumb we can figure it out.
2. I dislike the theme of the song. Basically you are saying about a guy that left you. I hear this topic all the time about girls that write these lyrics constantly. Come on people at least a thousands songs about this came out. Here is a few: Snuff, Dead Memories, Numb, Bitch, and alot more (I am just too tired of telling all the song names.)
But maybe I just don't get it because I am a boy.
3. I did like the rhyming it was good.
Anyways this song was okay. I think that you are a good lyric writer but please don't use this topic alot.
well this is a cool song.
ima put a song on here soon
hope you check it out.......and your song is like those emotional songs
and those songs always turn out to be the best.
keep up the good work.