White hot blood
Spilling on the page
A hole in my heart
From the knife that you made
I’ll write about all of the hurt you caused me
I turn around one time
And scream at the top of my lungs
A knife in my back
You stabbed over again
Till I collapse in my blood and trust
All messed up
Darlin you’re a killer
You made the knife
The blood is on your hands
What will you do killer
Cuz you killed the girl I used to be
She was so naive
Don’t act so innocent
It ain’t doing you any favors
What, what will you do
When I turn the knives against you
Sharpen them till they gleam
Because the knives only leave scars
Of my trust
But it won’t, no it won’t happen again
Darlin you’re a thief
You stole my time
The trust is in your hands
What will you do thief
Cuz you stole the time so I grew up
Now I’m mature
Don’t act so innocent
It ain’t doing you any favors
Your a thief and a liar
A killer and someone who I regret
Ever getting close with
You put me through hell
But your only concern is you darlin
That’s the worst part
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Hi there, @Sullengirl2011!
Queenie here for a review!
I love your poem, and it is very relatable
to me, even though almost all the pieces I review are very relatable...it is true.
Now
These parts are my favourites:
The reason that these parts are my favourites is that they provide sharp images and they set the mood and tone of the poem, which is honestly very important.
My only critique
is a grammar issue :
Hmm, should'nt this be changed to You're a thief and a liar
But overall, this is a great, strong piece!
#NeverStopWriting !
Mucho Love,
Queenie❤️✨
It was nice poem.