Published November 26, 2022
In Poems
Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language.
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This has a strong meaning to it between 2 ex-lovers, one still looks for the other while the other doesn't care what happens to the other lover, no one can ever stay happy forever but there are bigger fish in the sea who are willing to stay by the side of another person for life but the other refuses to find another fish because that previous fish gave they're everything but left in the end.
You know what. This is relatable. Something very similar happened to me with my friends new girlfriend.
Seen as I'm here to review. I LOVE IT. Your vocab is amazing, like, you could be a walking dictionary. The bullet points make it easy to read and understand. The emotions that you've poured into this are very visible.
There's a couple of commas where full stops should be, but other than that I can't see any issues.
love love love it
Thanks for the review! I'm really glad you like it
Any "wrong" punctuation is intentional btw--this is pretty poetic, so I'm more focused on the creative than technical elements. Although I wonder if you might be talking about the semicolons? I just realized that they're kind of hard to distinguish in the font I used, oops XD
Alright, revised a little, this is the fourth (and final?) draft XD