Don't shred paper, shred waves!

This format is so creative! I have never read anything like this before but i really like how you wrote this poem! I cannot fully understand the meaning in all its depths too well just because I cannot analyze it very well, but I think I get the overall idea of it. The format almost creates two stories and meanings within once piece and that is genius. Good work with this poem and I couldn't agree more with your point as well as cannot wait to read more of your work to come soon in the future! I think you are going to go very far with writing in your life and pursue great things!:)

Finally, I get the remarkable opportunity to review a poem by Stranger, and break his heart by kicking this out of the Green Room! Woo! (I'm mostly kidding about the last one. Unless you feel sad about it; then I'm happy. )

To be honest, I liked the sharp contrast that you conveyed in this poem. The narrator is a carefree, relaxed person who would like to surf the waves, enjoy the scenery around him, and wants a fun life in general. In comparison, the person in the outer text (although you said the outer text are the words of two different people, frankly, I sort of merged them into one identity; they seem almost identical, as they both say the same thing and hem in the narrator from both sides) is harsher, focuses on education and studying, and is upset by the narrator's unwillingness to take part and focus on his/her education. This sort of contrast was clearly communicated through your descriptions, fascinating, and, overall, captivated me. It was simply that good; I could imagine the plights of both the narrator and the other figure, and that sharp contrast between how they view their lives and what they want to do with it. It's one of those deep pieces of poetry, one that communicates a lot of ideas and feelings, and you do a nice job of it. Needless to say, it contributed to the overall affect and power of the poem immensely.

I also like the way that you structure this poem. By placing the narrator in the center, and the other people on either side of the narrator, it feels like the narrator is being constricted. The other people are fuming, upset about his tearing up his work, and not devoting himself to school. They're hemming him in, unwilling to let him do as he wishes, and all he wants is an escape. A sunset, a lake, waves, a boat, a life that he would like to live, not a life that the other people want him to live. This structure does a nice job of highlighting the major conflict of the poem, exemplifying the narrator's opinions, and shows his situation and his solution. In all, it contributes immensely to the quality of the poem.

This poem was fantastic, Strange. I enjoyed reading it from start to finish. I like the ideas that it communicates, the overall theme of the work, and the strong impression it leaves on the reader. This was an immensely fantastic poem, and I look forward to seeing the ones that you create in the future. Well done!

This was incredibly confusing to read at first but in a good way.

I like the three different points of view - I'm not sure you even need to explain it, like you did, but then, I don't know what it would be like to read without immediately knowing it's three points of view. I do feel like it made for a good way to impart a kind of common message in a new way.

The words provided by the first character versus the direct statements of the third give great context to the narrator, which really emphasizes the calmness of his? her? hobby.

"I turn to the boat, and bubbles
caused by the blades enter my eyes."

I found this part confusing to read, mainly because of where you choose to break. I was trying quite hard to figure out where blades had come from. Rereading it it makes more sense, but I would consider taking a look at it, just because it's confusing the first time around.

"Mikey, done speaking here at this school."

I actually did not like this line. While the casual tone of this character is entertaining and great contrast to the other two, I found this one too direct and a bit out of place. By now, the reader understands that the character is making some big speech (to whom, we don't know, but do we need to?). I feel like it's unnecessary. You could take this line out and make the next one "Listen, bros, before I go" or something like that.

Otherwise, this really confusing poem is actually a great read. I loved the unconventional format here. Good job.

-Cairo