I stared at him digesting all the lies and empty promises, first love, first mate, he was my deceptive angel a lethal dose of kryptonite...So why coulden't I walk away knowing he would destroy me in the end as he always had. try as I might to pull away I knew I never would as long has he wanted me...Needed me. Was it the need to be needed or him himself? I fell hard. And when he chooses to walk away what will I be then? The ashes after a fire cold desolate and alone? Broken? I hate this man and his amber gaze...But I love him twice as much. He with his amber eyes like liquid sunshine and dark hair like a ravens wing skin with slightest sunkissed skin my angel...my perfect liar.
He kissed me...I melted I gave he took all, I died because just as I new he'd never be true. The liar. What started out blessing quickly turned into a curse screaming fighting lying. I hid beyond a wall of intoxication am I forsakin? By him my love, my hatred? I can know longer take it he eighther needs leave and let me be as in never come back because the selfish creature that hides under his human skin takes all of me. Or stay when he comes to me so I will no longer bleed. I've cried for him I've died for him Now it is his turn because ai am too angered to be decieved.
Besides the obvious grammatical and spelling mistakes, I think you've taken something that everyone experiences in life and put it down in writing in a full stream of consciousness. I like it when someone pours their heart out (yanks it out of their chest and just lets it seep into fingers and lets them do the talking). "He kissed me...I melted. I gave, he took all." That line alone I think many people can relate to and fully understand. I believe you are a very good writer and you have the heart and passion for it but the spelling and grammatical mistakes do make it hard for some people to read and fully comprehend what you are trying to get across. I would just say work on that and you have got some great material!
Hi, I knew we all make typos (especially me, I am the worlds worst!) I just found this a bit confusing and one too many typos. This is just my opinion and it's just to help you so do not take it personally. You do seem to have good ideas though so keep it up.