Hey Stori! Irish here, and Ima review you now! What What?!
So, first I'm gonna say, I thought this was kinda confusing. But it was interesting! Short, but interesting!
The only thing I noticed that seemed wrong to me:
I shivered. The wind was picking up and I needed shelter but good.
I read this over twice and I have no idea what you're trying to say.
That was really the only thing I saw was wrong, other than the fact that it was so short.
Keep up the good work!
-Irish
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