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When Realities Glitch

by Starzy62199

Published September 16, 2026

16+ Violence

In When Realities Glitch

Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence.

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The sun in Oakhaven didn’t rise so much as it switched on, casting a perpetual, golden-hour glow over the cul-de-sac. For Zachary Trompé, life was a metronome of pleasantries. Every morning at 8:00 AM sharp, he stepped onto his porch to the sound of Mr. Lewis’s gravelly “Morning, Zach!” from three houses down. It was a world of manicured lawns, white picket fences. But the rhythm skipped a beat that day. When Zachary stepped outside, the street was silent. Mr. Lewis’s porch light was still burning; his newspaper sat untouched on the driveway. A small seed of unease took root in his gut. “Mom have you seen Mrs. Andrews?” Zachary asked at dinner. HIs mother didn’t look up from her mashed potatoes. “People move ,dear.”Without saying goodbye?” Zachary Pressed, his voice rising. “Mr.Lewis’s car is still in the garage.”

The next day, Zachary went to find Daniel Adamson, His best friend in all of Oakhaven. They were supposed to fix the carburetor on Daniel’s rusted ‘67 Mustang today, but when Zachary reached the Adamson house, his blood turned to ice. It wasn’t just empty- it felt hollow.

He peered through the living room window. The curtains were gone. The furniture was still there, but as he shifted his head, the perspective warped. The sofa didn't have a backside; the television was a flat image plastered against a wooden stand. The entire interior looked like cardboard cutouts in a theater production. “Daniel?” he whispered. Zachary sprinted home, his heart hammering against his ribs like a trapped bird. The neighborhood felt like a state where the actors were quitting one by one, leaving the sets to rot. He notices the sky now-the “sun” hadn’t moved. It was 2:00PM, but the shadows were exactly where they had been at 8:00AM. He burst through the door, shouting for his parents. “Mom! Dad! Something is wrong with the street! Daniel is-” He stopped. 

The living room was eerily still. 

The television was on, muted,showing a loop of a crackling fireplace. The flames repeated the same three-second flicker, over and over. “Dad?” In the kitchen, two plates steaming pot roast sat on the table, forks neatly aligned, but the chairs were empty. He burst into his parents’ bedroom. The bed was made with military precision. He crossed to his mothers vanity, his hands shaking so violently he knocked over a crystal vase. It didn’t shatter; it bounced with a dull,plastic thud. THIS ISN'T REAL. As the words hit his brain, the world began to fail. A high-pitched whine,like a dying hard drive, began to vibrate behind his ears. The golden sunlight of the bedroom blurred into a smear of yellow. The smell of pot roast was replaced by a sharp metallic tang-the smell of copper and ozone. Zachary grabbed his head, his skull. His fingers clawed at his scalp, desperate to tear away pain, but they didn't find hair or skin. 

They hooked into a cold, synthetic ridge that circled his skull, hidden just beneath a layer of artificial scalp. With a cry of terror, he gripped the ridge and pulled.

 The sensation was like peeling a wet bandage off an open wound-or a scab off his soul. Zachary fell. He didn’t hit the carpeted floor of a suburban bedroom. He landed on a cold, rusted grating that bit into his knees. He vomited, the bile stinging his throat, but what came out was a thin, fluorescent blue fluid. He blinked, his eyes burning as they tried to adjust to a darkness so profound it felt heavy. In his hands , he wasn’t holding a scrap of paper. He was holding a heavy,scarred helmet,lined with hundreds of pulsing, fiber-optic needles that dripped with clear conductive gel. He looked around. He was in a small, cramped pod no larger than a coffin. Beyond the open hatch, a massive cavern stretched into an infinite, suffocating distance. It was filled with rows upon rows of identical pods, stacked miles high, each humming with a low, predatory power. Each one was labeled with a serial number. His read:TR-0111-PÉ. “Zachary?”he whispered. The name felt like foreign language in his mouth, a series of sounds he didn't know how to shape. He tried to remember his mother’s laugh, the color of his first bike, the face of Daniel Adamson. Nothing. 

The memories were dissolving, flickering away like a corrupted file. He realized with a jolt of horror that “Trompé” was French for deceived. The family name hadn't been a name at all: it was a label. A cruel pun left by whoever-or whatever-had built this cage. He looked at his arms. They weren’t the tanned, athletic limbs of a suburban teenager. They were thin, sickly pale, and covered in surgical ports that hissed as they leaked air. 

He didn’t know his age. He didn't know his real name. He was a ghost in a machine, a battery for a world that didn't exist. 

He looked out at the sea of pods, millions of people still trapped in their “golden hour,” eating their digital pot roast and tending to their phantom hydrangeas. He wanted to scream, to wake them all, but his lungs were weak, and wire, he had never felt more dead. He reached out to touch the cold metal of the neighboring pod, wondering if Daniel was inside, or if Daniel had ever been anything more than a line of code designed to keep Zachary from feeling alone.

Zachary huddled against the rusted grating, clutching his helmet, the only “real” thing he had left in a universe of lies.

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JustBug wrote a review Review · 1h ago

Hello, JustBug here with a review for you.

Praise:
The sense of unease that you created was truly amazing! Certain lines really highlighted the horror and made us ask questions about the world around us.
Examples:

his blood turned to ice. It wasn’t just empty- it felt hollow.

and
but what came out was a thin, fluorescent blue fluid.


The realization of Zachary's last name was brilliant and added yet another layer to the psychological torture Zachary is going through in this story.

He realized with a jolt of horror that “Trompé” was French for deceived.


Critiques:
There are a few grammatical errors in the writing that disrupt the flow a bit.
Examples:

The I in this: "HIs mother didn’t look up"

and the capital P in this:"Zachary Pressed, his voice rising"

The climax moved a bit too quickly, once Zachary pulled at the ridge on his skull. Slowing this down a bit could maximize the impact of this terrifying scene.

With a cry of terror, he gripped the ridge and pulled.


Overall, this was a terrifying story that makes us question what we know to be real.

Thank you, have a good day/night, and stay safe! 🖤

creeperfeverdreams wrote a review Review · Sep 17

Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the jinxed S’more?

Top Graham Cracker - Zachary is living a wonderful life, but a glitch in the matrix brings him to a horrifyingly cold reality.

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I think there should be more time spent with how pleasant the fake world was so the ending can hit harder, but those are just my thoughts.

Chocolate Bar - I love the way that you describe how the sunlight is a yellow smear and how the post roast smells like metal and ozone. It’s like the switch hit faster than it did before and really settles how much rot is in this world. Then in the middle, when he isn’t sure who he is or how he can get out, it makes me feel even more terrible for him because of how he’s so lost.


Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, a frightening story about the beautiful world being nothing more than a facade. I have enjoyed reading this. I’ll read more if you plan to add more but this is fine on its own. And now…

I wish you a spooktacular day/night! ^v^



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