Winter's Poem

by Stargirl101

Published February 1, 2012

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Blue eyes flecked with a silver stars dust,
Tears drip from them ever so softly.
The earth does seem more cold

Black hair blowing in the wind,
Soft lips just so tinged with sadness.
Don't ever fade.

Pale hands wrapped tight around chest,
Thin body shivers in winter's zephyr.
Why won't you come back?
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Amaranth wrote a review Review · Feb 1, 2012

I really like the vivid language used with this poem. It's short, sweet, and elegant- immediately gripping and food for the soul. I'd like to see more like this.

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crescent commented Comment · Feb 1, 2012

I really like the way this reads; your use of language is so elegant. My favorite lines are 1 and 5. There's missing punctuation on third line. :/ (A winter faerie must have stolen it!) Er-ignore that comment. I could really feel the chill of the wind and the sense of abandonment the girl feels as each moment drags on. The last line reminds me of the little girl crying in the beginning of the 2nd Quarter Quell on youtube. Good job, and thanks for the lovely read! Happy Writing!

-Crescent



Hope is being able to see that there is light despite all of the darkness.
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