Hello, my fellow writer! I'm here today to review your lovely poem!
I really liked your poem overall, but a few things bug me a little.
First of all "watching the sunrise through this window," in this sentence the "this" doesn't have much context; maybe using "the" or "my" could make it better.
And that fourth verse...It was really emotional and has hit me right in the feels; especially because I am a person who struggles with the concept of god.
The second verse was good as well, it tells the difference between our dreams and reality of life pretty good.
The theme itself especially affected me because I just left my hometown (it was for 11 years) for college.
So this amazing poem really gives me an emotional insight about leaving and coming back to the place we used to call home.
I also liked the fact, that the poem is kinda written progressive.
Other than these praises I can say that you describe the emotions without explaining them too much, and that is a really good quality in writing in both poems and novels.
I hope you continue to write your poems so I can read them furthermore!
Have a nice day!
-Your Friendly Neighborhood Panda
Points: 40
Reviews: 3
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