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Sunny and the Syntax Errors of Doom: Chapter 3.1

by Spearmint


Professor Polymorphism placed the map on the table and held down the corners with some books. Sunny grinned and immediately leaned over the table, eyes wide and trying to absorb every detail of the map.

The map showed a large landmass in the center, covered with lines showing the borders of various lands. A scattering of islands was on the western edge of the landmass and there were fanciful designs in the corners. Everything on the map was labeled in Javalandian, but Sunny could see that the region in the center was decorated with some semicolon art. "Is that Javaland?"

"It sure is!" Professor Polly pointed at the region to the east of Javaland. "That's Pythonia, and to the north we have the Republic of C++. And some of the more notable islands to the west are Pascal, Perl, and Fortran. But you don't need to worry about any of that."

Adelia made a face. "Yeah, we went to Pascal once, and it seemed like everyone's favorite colors were blue and yellow. And some people talked in all-caps, like they were shouting at us! I think Javaland is a much better place."

Sunny laughed. "Okay, noted."

"Javaland is indeed a wonderful place." Professor Polly grew serious for a moment. "Our little… issue… hasn't interfered with that so far. But still, it'd be best to find the errors' descriptions as quickly as possible, before that changes. Has Robert provided you with any details?"

Sunny shook her head. "I tried running a program earlier, and a rather unhelpful error popped up. Robert said the descriptions were stolen, but how does that even work?"

Professor Polly tapped her chin thoughtfully. "Well, we're not quite sure either." She pointed at a few towns on the map of Javaland. "There are various error guardians stationed around our land. They make sure programmers have all the information they need to fix the errors those guardians are in charge of. But recently, the words describing the errors have been slipping off whatever scrolls or screens they were stored on."

"Yesterday I saw some errors flying like birds!" Adelia piped up. "One description was even flapping its red text like wings." She demonstrated by tucking her hands in her armpits and flapping her arms.

Professor Polly nodded. "Across Javaland, these error descriptions have physically escaped their bindings and have been seen heading here." She placed her finger on a triangle on the map. "Spaghetti Code Mountain."

Sunny hummed thoughtfully. "That doesn't sound too scary. ‘Spaghetti' is a lot less intimidating than ‘doom' or some unpronounceable fantasy name."

Professor Polly shuddered. "Oh, believe me, something doesn't need to sound scary to be scary. Spaghetti code is an absolute nightmare. The disorganized structure, unnecessary lines of code everywhere… Ugh, it gives me a headache just thinking about it."

"Oh." Then perhaps Spaghetti Code Mountain would be an appropriate end goal for Sunny's quest. She could be like Frodo! Except instead of destroying a ring she was going to investigate errors, and for some reason everything here worked in code, and instead of hobbit or dwarven or elven buddies she had a robot… Anyways. "How do I get there?"

Professor Polly tapped a little illustration of a curved-roof building on the map. "Parentheses Town, where we are right now, is here." She moved her finger upwards to a drawing of a boxy building. "Variable Village is a little to the north, and from there, you can follow the Conditional River to the Loop Factories." Sunny squinted at the river. It looked like a tree, with branches running down a mountain range and joining up with the trunk, which twisted towards Variable Village. Then the professor pointed at a doodle of a little train, which ran on a curvy path throughout Javaland. "The Array Train runs nearly to the foot of Spaghetti Code Mountain."

Sunny's eyes sparkled. She'd been a bit taken aback by all the coding at first, but this was more like it! There was a clear path laid out for her quest, and although she'd no doubt get distracted by side quests or something along the way, she liked having a plan. "Wonderful! When can I start? Can we go now? Robert, are you done charging?"

The robot beeped in complaint. "I'm only at seventy percent."

Professor Polymorphism raised an eyebrow. "And are you really that eager to rush into this, Sunny? I know Earthlings are supposedly summoned here to be heroes, but it'll be a hard journey for even an experienced adventurer."

Sunny grinned. "I don't doubt it! But don't worry, Professor. I have the power of plot on my side." She briefly considered striking a heroic pose, but decided it would be too much.

Adelia giggled. On the other side of the room, Robert sighed wearily and said, "I'll be done charging by the morning. Professor Polly, would it be alright for Sunny to stay the night here?"

"Of course, dear!" The professor rolled up the map and started organizing some of the books into a stack again. "If you'd like some bedtime reading, these reference manuals are wonderful." She placed a thick green book in front of Sunny, then plopped an even larger red book on top. "Much more effective for falling asleep than counting parentheses, if I do say so myself. Do try to read the first few chapters before you fall asleep, though."

Sunny looked at the books. She knew knowledge could be just as handy as a sword sometimes, but this sounded an awful lot like homework. Still, she nodded and added the blue and white book to the stack.

As Sunny lifted the stack and tried not to trip over anything, Professor Polly led the way through the right archway. Once Sunny had gotten the stack into a stable position, she glanced at the decorations and photographs on the walls. They must have all been recent pictures, because they showed Professor Polly in a series of brightly colored dresses with Adelia on her lap, wearing the same indigo blanket cape. Neither of them seemed to have aged from the time the pictures were taken.

The ceiling and floor were decorated with repeating patterns of semicolons, curly braces, and square braces. Sunny wished she could sketch them in her notebook, but she didn't think she could manage that without dropping the stack of books.

Finally, the professor stopped in front of a plain green door and opened it to reveal a small bedroom. Sunny smiled gratefully at the professor, then deposited her books on a desk in the corner. She sighed, eyed the books determinedly, and started reading.


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Alright, so I was wrong. It wasn't Professor Polly OR Robert being the bad guys (yet) but they were actually the quest-giving mentor types. But that apart, this is actually much better than the last chapter, especially if you are a nerd.

The geography is pretty fun, and the names derived from programming languages with actual features of those languages (for example, in Pascal, the blue and yellow, and of course, the use of ALL CAPS).

I definitely think that geography can be explored more in this chapter than has been done.

Also, Frodo is definitely the greatest role model, no doubt about it 10/10. This chapter is one of my favorites. Also, counting parentheses!

Error guardians are one of the key characters mentioned, and I have a hunch they are playing an important part in this chapter. I find the whole problem quite interesting.




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The geography is pretty fun, and the names derived from programming languages with actual features of those languages (for example, in Pascal, the blue and yellow, and of course, the use of ALL CAPS).

Yes!! I'm glad you noticed that. :]

I definitely think that geography can be explored more in this chapter than has been done.

Hmm... maybe I can slip a few more details in...

Thanks again for all your reviews; they made my day! Hope you also have a wonderful day/night! =D





Thanks for such a kind reply, mint!



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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: I love that it seems we're now getting a better sense of the timing and scale of Sunny's quest here and its slowly starting to get laid out in front of her. It seems like it won't be too much longer before the quest actually begins and I'm quite excited to get to that part.

Anyway let's get right to it,

Professor Polymorphism placed the map on the table and held down the corners with some books. Sunny grinned and immediately leaned over the table, eyes wide and trying to absorb every detail of the map.

The map showed a large landmass in the center, covered with lines showing the borders of various lands. A scattering of islands was on the western edge of the landmass and there were fanciful designs in the corners. Everything on the map was labeled in Javalandian, but Sunny could see that the region in the center was decorated with some semicolon art. "Is that Javaland?"


Well this is definitely an interesting place to start here. We've got ourselves quite a sizeable map by the looks of things which means there's a bit more to this world than you'd think at least, although I can't really see how these other lands will come into play here just quite yet.

"It sure is!" Professor Polly pointed at the region to the east of Javaland. "That's Pythonia, and to the north we have the Republic of C++. And some of the more notable islands to the west are Pascal, Perl, and Fortran. But you don't need to worry about any of that."

Adelia made a face. "Yeah, we went to Pascal once, and it seemed like everyone's favorite colors were blue and yellow. And some people talked in all-caps, like they were shouting at us! I think Javaland is a much better place."

Sunny laughed. "Okay, noted."


Love that little compilation there to develop the world, although these details are making me curious now. These are being tossed about rather carelessly for the moment with the information about these other places but I wonder if Sunny will end up having to experience all of these first hand at some point.

"Javaland is indeed a wonderful place." Professor Polly grew serious for a moment. "Our little… issue… hasn't interfered with that so far. But still, it'd be best to find the errors' descriptions as quickly as possible, before that changes. Has Robert provided you with any details?"

Sunny shook her head. "I tried running a program earlier, and a rather unhelpful error popped up. Robert said the descriptions were stolen, but how does that even work?"

Professor Polly tapped her chin thoughtfully. "Well, we're not quite sure either." She pointed at a few towns on the map of Javaland. "There are various error guardians stationed around our land. They make sure programmers have all the information they need to fix the errors those guardians are in charge of. But recently, the words describing the errors have been slipping off whatever scrolls or screens they were stored on."


Ooooh always love to see the main problem starting to get highlighted here. This is definitely the first time we had this level of detail being put into it too, so I'm glad to see we're getting that in here too. I can't wait to see what its going to be like when the quest to recover all of this actually gets underway.

"Yesterday I saw some errors flying like birds!" Adelia piped up. "One description was even flapping its red text like wings." She demonstrated by tucking her hands in her armpits and flapping her arms.

Professor Polly nodded. "Across Javaland, these error descriptions have physically escaped their bindings and have been seen heading here." She placed her finger on a triangle on the map. "Spaghetti Code Mountain."

Sunny hummed thoughtfully. "That doesn't sound too scary. ‘Spaghetti' is a lot less intimidating than ‘doom' or some unpronounceable fantasy name."


Spaghetti is definitely not the scariest sounding name there. This whole depiction here is a doing a lovely job of making this whole world suddenly feel a lot more cartoony than it initially was and I can't decide if I love that even more or not.

Professor Polly shuddered. "Oh, believe me, something doesn't need to sound scary to be scary. Spaghetti code is an absolute nightmare. The disorganized structure, unnecessary lines of code everywhere… Ugh, it gives me a headache just thinking about it."

"Oh." Then perhaps Spaghetti Code Mountain would be an appropriate end goal for Sunny's quest. She could be like Frodo! Except instead of destroying a ring she was going to investigate errors, and for some reason everything here worked in code, and instead of hobbit or dwarven or elven buddies she had a robot… Anyways. "How do I get there?"


Sunny are you trying to break the fourth wall there a little? Professor Polly's concern aside, I do love Sunny just absolutely deciding to run with all the code related craziness of the world. We'll see quite how far she ends up getting here.

Professor Polly tapped a little illustration of a curved-roof building on the map. "Parentheses Town, where we are right now, is here." She moved her finger upwards to a drawing of a boxy building. "Variable Village is a little to the north, and from there, you can follow the Conditional River to the Loop Factories." Sunny squinted at the river. It looked like a tree, with branches running down a mountain range and joining up with the trunk, which twisted towards Variable Village. Then the professor pointed at a doodle of a little train, which ran on a curvy path throughout Javaland. "The Array Train runs nearly to the foot of Spaghetti Code Mountain."

Sunny's eyes sparkled. She'd been a bit taken aback by all the coding at first, but this was more like it! There was a clear path laid out for her quest, and although she'd no doubt get distracted by side quests or something along the way, she liked having a plan. "Wonderful! When can I start? Can we go now? Robert, are you done charging?"


Ahhhh loving the description of that map and the path. All these extra little connections you do how code actually works really do wonders to make this a lot more fun to read, and it seems with this we're also getting close to the quest actually starting so that's naturally making this even more fun.

The robot beeped in complaint. "I'm only at seventy percent."

Professor Polymorphism raised an eyebrow. "And are you really that eager to rush into this, Sunny? I know Earthlings are supposedly summoned here to be heroes, but it'll be a hard journey for even an experienced adventurer."

Sunny grinned. "I don't doubt it! But don't worry, Professor. I have the power of plot on my side." She briefly considered striking a heroic pose, but decided it would be too much.


*Gasp* Sunny we don't reveal that superpower to everyone so carelessly. And we always do the heroic pose. That is essential to striking fear into the hearts of the helpless villains. Although I do have regrettably agree on the wisdom there about not jumping in too early even though I definitely want to see Sunny jumping in too early.

"Of course, dear!" The professor rolled up the map and started organizing some of the books into a stack again. "If you'd like some bedtime reading, these reference manuals are wonderful." She placed a thick green book in front of Sunny, then plopped an even larger red book on top. "Much more effective for falling asleep than counting parentheses, if I do say so myself. Do try to read the first few chapters before you fall asleep, though."

Sunny looked at the books. She knew knowledge could be just as handy as a sword sometimes, but this sounded an awful lot like homework. Still, she nodded and added the blue and white book to the stack.


Oh that is definitely homework. Poor Sunny ending up having to do homework even in the middle of being an adventurer. Although to be an experienced adventurer particularly in those lands one does definitely have to a lot of homework.

As Sunny lifted the stack and tried not to trip over anything, Professor Polly led the way through the right archway. Once Sunny had gotten the stack into a stable position, she glanced at the decorations and photographs on the walls. They must have all been recent pictures, because they showed Professor Polly in a series of brightly colored dresses with Adelia on her lap, wearing the same indigo blanket cape. Neither of them seemed to have aged from the time the pictures were taken.

The ceiling and floor were decorated with repeating patterns of semicolons, curly braces, and square braces. Sunny wished she could sketch them in her notebook, but she didn't think she could manage that without dropping the stack of books.

Finally, the professor stopped in front of a plain green door and opened it to reveal a small bedroom. Sunny smiled gratefully at the professor, then deposited her books on a desk in the corner. She sighed, eyed the books determinedly, and started reading.


OOooh love these little decorations. Some interesting little details chucked in there amongst it all, I of course can't help but wonder if and how those things are potentially going to end up coming into play later, because at least the not aging thing sound like it'll definitely be relevant at some point.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

Overall: Overall, I think we've got ourselves all set up in a nice little spot here, all ready to embark on what's to come next. I can't wait to see just how much Sunny manages to learn from these giant books and what's going to end up happening as a result of that.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry




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Omg so many reviews !! Thank youu C:
*Gasp* Sunny we don't reveal that superpower to everyone so carelessly. And we always do the heroic pose. That is essential to striking fear into the hearts of the helpless villains.

XDD Of course, of course.
Some interesting little details chucked in there amongst it all, I of course can't help but wonder if and how those things are potentially going to end up coming into play later

;) if i remember >.>
Thanks for the review!! Always love reading your reactions to things. =P <3



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Professor Polymorphism placed the map on the table and held down the corners with some books. Sunny grinned and immediately leaned over the table, eyes wide and trying to absorb every detail of the map.

The map showed a large landmass in the center, covered with lines showing the borders of various lands. A scattering of islands was on the western edge of the landmass and there were fanciful designs in the corners. Everything on the map was labeled in Javalandian, but Sunny could see that the region in the center was decorated with some semicolon art. "Is that Javaland?"

"It sure is!" Professor Polly pointed at the region to the east of Javaland. "That's Pythonia, and to the north we have the Republic of C++. And some of the more notable islands to the west are Pascal, Perl, and Fortran. But you don't need to worry about any of that."


OKAY. SO. I am no mind reader and I have no idea where you plan to take this story... BUT. If we truly don't have to worry about it, you can probably take out the paragraphs long description and somehow integrate this cool information into the narrative of the story somehow, instead of taking away from the next part...!!

"Javaland is indeed a wonderful place." Professor Polly grew serious for a moment. "Our little… issue… hasn't interfered with that so far. But still, it'd be best to find the errors' descriptions as quickly as possible, before that changes.


AHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11 IT IS HERE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

But okay... here's the thing. I am not as adept at programming as my siblings, so when I hear about descriptions, I'm like, "Uhhhh... can you explain this a bit???" So a little description here would be FABULOUS.

Has Robert provided you with any details?"


I want Robert to respond to this with sass! Like, maybe Polly would kind of give Robert some side eye and Robert would be like, "You're the professor. You explain." Or I DON'T KNOW. Just... I need more Robert and his sass in my life, lol.

Sunny shook her head. "I tried running a program earlier, and a rather unhelpful error popped up. Robert said the descriptions were stolen, but how does that even work?"

Professor Polly tapped her chin thoughtfully. "Well, we're not quite sure either." She pointed at a few towns on the map of Javaland. "There are various error guardians stationed around our land. They make sure programmers have all the information they need to fix the errors those guardians are in charge of. But recently, the words describing the errors have been slipping off whatever scrolls or screens they were stored on."


OH. So like... descriptors here are RADICALLY different than what we're used to??? I would totally describe what Sunny's perception of a description is -- as someone who is somewhat familiar with Java -- and then contrast it with this new image of description. Because this is STARTLINGLY different and you need to emphasize that... probably with a rule, lol. Like, she probably would be surprised and think, "Wait... no, I shouldn't be surprised, but DUDE. WOW." Or something like that!

Professor Polly nodded. "Across Javaland, these error descriptions have physically escaped their bindings and have been seen heading here." She placed her finger on a triangle on the map. "Spaghetti Code Mountain."


OH NO. SPAGHETTI CODE MOUNTAIN??? Already this sounds dismal...

Sunny hummed thoughtfully. "That doesn't sound too scary. ‘Spaghetti' is a lot less intimidating than ‘doom' or some unpronounceable fantasy name."


NO SUNNY. DO NOT BE FOOLED BY THIS.

Professor Polly shuddered. "Oh, believe me, something doesn't need to sound scary to be scary. Spaghetti code is an absolute nightmare.


...I think I would leave it like that and let Sunny find out what a nightmare spaghetti code is... XD

The disorganized structure, unnecessary lines of code everywhere… Ugh, it gives me a headache just thinking about it."


... so like, delete this and make it extra horrible when Sunny encounters it, haha. (THOUGH. I like writing horror, so maybe I should stop talking, lol.)

"Oh." Then perhaps Spaghetti Code Mountain would be an appropriate end goal for Sunny's quest. She could be like Frodo! Except instead of destroying a ring she was going to investigate errors, and for some reason everything here worked in code, and instead of hobbit or dwarven or elven buddies she had a robot… Anyways. "How do I get there?"


...the specific name drop of Lord of the Rings feels a little random. I would probably just have her contemplate about Generic Fantasy Novel.

Professor Polly tapped a little illustration of a curved-roof building on the map. "Parentheses Town, where we are right now, is here." She moved her finger upwards to a drawing of a boxy building. "Variable Village is a little to the north, and from there, you can follow the Conditional River to the Loop Factories." Sunny squinted at the river. It looked like a tree, with branches running down a mountain range and joining up with the trunk, which twisted towards Variable Village. Then the professor pointed at a doodle of a little train, which ran on a curvy path throughout Javaland. "The Array Train runs nearly to the foot of Spaghetti Code Mountain."


...I would probably split up this paragraph like so...

Professor Polly tapped a little illustration of a curved-roof building on the map. "Parentheses Town, where we are right now, is here." She moved her finger upwards to a drawing of a boxy building. "Variable Village is a little to the north, and from there, you can follow the Conditional River to the Loop Factories."

Sunny squinted at the river. It looked like a tree, with branches running down a mountain range and joining up with the trunk, which twisted towards Variable Village. [ADD MORE OF OF SUNNY'S THOUGHTS AND INNER DIALOGUE ABOUT THIS WORLD.]

Then the professor pointed at a doodle of a little train, which ran on a curvy path throughout Javaland. "The Array Train runs nearly to the foot of Spaghetti Code Mountain."


The robot beeped in complaint. "I'm only at seventy percent."


YASSSSS ROBERT.

Professor Polymorphism raised an eyebrow. "And are you really that eager to rush into this, Sunny? I know Earthlings are supposedly summoned here to be heroes, but it'll be a hard journey for even an experienced adventurer."


Now I am wondering why an Earthling came here last time, lol...

Sunny grinned. "I don't doubt it! But don't worry, Professor. I have the power of plot on my side." She briefly considered striking a heroic pose, but decided it would be too much.


LOL.

The ceiling and floor were decorated with repeating patterns of semicolons, curly braces, and square braces. Sunny wished she could sketch them in her notebook, but she didn't think she could manage that without dropping the stack of books.


I was hoping they would have these decorating their house, lol.

She sighed, eyed the books determinedly, and started reading.


ALSO. REMEMBER. YOU NEED TO SLEEP, SUNNY. LITTLE TO NO SLEEP LEADS TO NONSENSICAL THINGS. LIKE THIS REVIEW.




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Review 4/6! =DD
AHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11 IT IS HERE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

But okay... here's the thing. I am not as adept at programming as my siblings, so when I hear about descriptions, I'm like, "Uhhhh... can you explain this a bit???" So a little description here would be FABULOUS.

XD I can't help but chuckle a little at the idea of writing a description for descriptions, but that is definitely a good idea. I haven't been very clear on what exactly they are, huh? I guess I wasn't entirely clear on them myself... I want to go with the idea of all the information regarding those errors and how to fix them disappearing, but I'm not sure how to say that in a short way when I refer to it throughout the story. Maybe I need a fancy name like The Disappearing or something?? XD

Or I DON'T KNOW. Just... I need more Robert and his sass in my life, lol.

I had no idea you'd like Robert this much, but I love it. XD

Now I am wondering why an Earthling came here last time, lol...

;)
actually that winky face is what I do when I haven't come up with anything yet >.> but shhh! xD

Thank you for the (sleep-deprived but still excellent) review!! <3




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