Hi Space!
I'm Ellie, and I'm here to give you a review. I really liked the idea behind this poem. To me, it's about loving someone even though they're hurting, and seeing the beauty and they might not see in themselves. I'm wondering if you've ever seen the movie Ordinary People. Your poem made me think of the central couple from that film. Their relationship operates very much in the same way in that they're both outcasts who find love with each other.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FTbjh-Hxijo
I guess I'm wondering if you can't include a little bit more detail. Right now, there are a few questions that I had. Are the narrator and the subject a couple, or is she a crush? Does he want to be in a relationship with her? Secondly, I think there should be a little bit more to go on than this mutual feeling of depression that they both share. Do they feel better when they're around each other? What are special moments that they share? Just things to think about.
Good work. Let me know if you have any questions!
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