There is a place, far, far away,
I drink from the waters when drowning in pain.
All of my grief washes away
At the halcyon waters of Halcyon Bay.
Where oceans of sapphire and sands of gold
Sing heavenly secrets, ne’er again to be told.
Where ruby red sunrise and tanzanite skies
Share ethereal paintings, priceless as life.
Come with me to Halcyon Bay,
You’ll see the mysteries of God’s very way.
Where nothing hurts, everything’s fine,
All things hold beauty, peace divine.
Where flora of emerald praise silver-lined clouds
Their dances remembered, world renowned.
Where crystal-clear moon cuts the dark with ease,
Keeping nightly watch for all to see.
There is a place, far, far away,
I drink from the waters when drowning in pain.
All of my grief washes away
At the halcyon waters of Halcyon Bay.
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A great effect was added when you repeated the first stanza at the end. The poem created imagery, and the first stanza was quite strong.
Hmm, sounds very great. Where may I find this Halcyon Bay?
Very nice, great imagery.
Nice...nice...the only nit-pick is that the 4th stanza didn't rhyme... Anyway, good job