I've decided to withdraw this piece, could an admin remove it once they get to it? (I don't know how to remove it myself if the function exists somewhere)
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Yes! I have very serious problems with the girls who think they can demand everything from their boyfriends--including his agreement to everything they say--and then justify it by saying, "Well, he's lucky I'm dating him at all. The least he can do is be my slave." I'm sick of it.
There should never be "tests" in a relationship. Either you trust each other, or you don't. And if you don't, then there's no reason to be together in the first place.
Find a girl who'll treat you right. You should never feel afraid of messing up with someone who supposedly loves you. Love is unconditional.
There were a few grammar/punctuation issues, but mostly it was well-written. Good luck with girls! They're not all retarded, I swear!
well a little rant is a perfect title for this peice...and usually listening to people complaing isn't very fun...but i didn't mind it in this peice really. i mean, after all the title sufficiently forewarned me of complaints...
i thought this peice, though written slightly scatterbrainedish (except you might have meant it that way, i don't know), was very good. i thought it was interesting to get inside of a male brain and see what he thinks, because let me tell you i have four sisters and went to an all girls school for the past four years of my life which means i know nothing about the male mind...
i think i liked the last line the best, it was a nice sum up of everything you said:
"Could I, for once, be a male with male views, and could that be enough sometime?"
except i think maybe you could have added an "s" to "sometime" to make it plural, i think it might sound better that way but that's just me.
so yea, overall, i like reading this peice, even though i don't know what to call it cause it's not a poem or a story or anything...good work though thanks!