Published May 13, 2006
a single silver note prolongs
a breath withheld
the slightest of shivers
and a fragment of a shipwrecked night
hangs
parallel to our own
do you remember how the wind smelled cold
and clean and free or
do you only remember what i
screamed to your back as you ran
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I love the language, and the format just complimented that =] Usually I hate it when poet's take a creative format, but I actually enjoyed this. you handled it well without being...annoying or cute, i suppose. or confusing. The poem was beautiful, too, so without the format it would still be very nice. Good job.