Young Writers Society

Wow. This poem was breathtaking and I have just recently gone through a situation like described in the poem and it gave me the feels. Its raw but at the same time it aggressive and addressing the hard truth. I loved the poem so much and there wasn't much I could say I didn't like. I will admit at first the questions being asked over and over seemed kinda like it was taking away from the piece but as I kept reading it really tied in. I really love this poem and I hope to see more like this. Thank you for writing.

Hello kira!:)
This was quite touching. It was really relatable and flowed really well. I think it is really nice because everyone goes through stuff like this at some point and always needs something to push them back in the right direction. It is a really sad poem but it is a good kind of sad. It is a relatable kind of sad. A really sad sad lol.
So, good job to you! GOOD JOB! I haven't seen any of your other works but I hope they are as good as this one!
I look forward to seeing them!
Your friend,
Honora

This is nicely done! Each line flowed really well together... and I can feel the raw emotion from this because of each line being voiced as the character's thoughts. Using a mask to compare how this character hides their true face is also a really good metaphor... and I think kt for in really well. I especially like the line "you saw me, my soul, all alone" because it really gives the readers a sense of vulnerability from the character.

I dont think there was particularly any errors to fix... so I'll just say it again: great job! Also, welcome to this community... I hope to read more of your work!

Hey, Che here for a quick review!

First of all, I would just like to say that you did a really good job at getting your emotions across in this poem. I could really feel the heartache practically fly off of each line. It felt like line after line of just raw emotion that made it pretty sad to read.

I did like the structure, though I think you could have separated it into stanzas just to make it a little easier on the eyes when reading it.

Overall, you did a superb job at making this a true emotive piece of poetry. Sorry if I keep repeating myself! I'm not really sure how else to phrase it, y'know?

Keep writing!

Regards, Che