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Your Lies

by Shakiraislam


It's me. Remember?

All those time we spent together?

All those time you said you're here and I believed you?

All those time you texted me don't worry I'm not gone?

Now look at you

You seem happy with her

How'd you lie like that?

Didn't bother to tell me the truth?

I wish I could wear a mask like you did and make you feel better

So you could've lied a little longer

But I'm afraid I couldn't wear any makeup to hide my pains from you

You saw my skin, you saw me naked

You saw me, my soul, all alone

But Now I'm okay, I can also wear a mask

And lie to everyone, even me

I'm okay, to see you with her, holding hands

Where you used to hold mine

Now I think maybe you also said to her that you're here

And she believed all your lies.

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Tue Apr 16, 2019 12:25 am
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brookeallo wrote a review...

Wow. This poem was breathtaking and I have just recently gone through a situation like described in the poem and it gave me the feels. Its raw but at the same time it aggressive and addressing the hard truth. I loved the poem so much and there wasn't much I could say I didn't like. I will admit at first the questions being asked over and over seemed kinda like it was taking away from the piece but as I kept reading it really tied in. I really love this poem and I hope to see more like this. Thank you for writing. :)

Shakiraislam says...

Omg you're welcome. It's really great having you guys saying things about my poem. Because few days earlier nobody said it was good

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Fri Apr 12, 2019 3:32 am
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Honora wrote a review...

Hello kira!:)
This was quite touching. It was really relatable and flowed really well. I think it is really nice because everyone goes through stuff like this at some point and always needs something to push them back in the right direction. It is a really sad poem but it is a good kind of sad. It is a relatable kind of sad. A really sad sad lol.
So, good job to you! GOOD JOB! I haven't seen any of your other works but I hope they are as good as this one! :)
I look forward to seeing them!
Your friend,

Shakiraislam says...

Thank you. It's really great to see so many reviews. And I don't know what to say. Thank you for reading too. It's really amazing to see you guys reviews and stuff. Thank you

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Wed Apr 10, 2019 1:32 pm
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FabihaNeera wrote a review...

This is nicely done! Each line flowed really well together... and I can feel the raw emotion from this because of each line being voiced as the character's thoughts. Using a mask to compare how this character hides their true face is also a really good metaphor... and I think kt for in really well. I especially like the line "you saw me, my soul, all alone" because it really gives the readers a sense of vulnerability from the character.

I dont think there was particularly any errors to fix... so I'll just say it again: great job! Also, welcome to this community... I hope to read more of your work!

Shakiraislam says...

I'm really excited to post my stories and everything I've done here. I'll post everything. Like literally everything. Thank you so much.

FabihaNeera says...

No problem :D And I can't wait until you do!

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Wed Apr 10, 2019 9:49 am
4revgreen wrote a review...

Hey, Che here for a quick review!

First of all, I would just like to say that you did a really good job at getting your emotions across in this poem. I could really feel the heartache practically fly off of each line. It felt like line after line of just raw emotion that made it pretty sad to read.

I did like the structure, though I think you could have separated it into stanzas just to make it a little easier on the eyes when reading it.

Overall, you did a superb job at making this a true emotive piece of poetry. Sorry if I keep repeating myself! I'm not really sure how else to phrase it, y'know?

Keep writing!

Regards, Che :-)

Shakiraislam says...

Thank you so much. I'm glad to have this reviews. And about stanzas I haven't tried but I'll. Thank you so much.

*cries into coffee*
— LadyLizz