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Inside of me.

by ShaeSnow


Inside of me is me

given to me by me

All of me is me 

made for me by me.

Oh Inside of me is love

For those around and about

All of the people I see

destined for something ...

See, Inside of me i dream

Of being known and renown 

All of the people who see 

Appreciating what I do.

But inside Of me i doubt

Can I be ever great?

All of the wonders of life

What can I add to it?

And Inside of me there's you

Who guides and is always there 

All of the time I'm alive

Showing me errs and the time

Though Inside of me i hold

The dreams of those I'll aid

All of their purpose they see

As long as I show the light

Yet Inside of me is without

Not for me but for you

All of me is not mine

Meant for service to others 

So Inside of me i give

That which has grown 

All that I have in me

To work without and well


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Sun Jun 26, 2016 4:53 am
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Chilow for the review, here we go :D

"Inside of me is me

given to me by me

All of me is me

made for me by me." ---- Much as RippleGylf said, these lines alone pretty accurately sum up what it truly means to be yourself, to be me. Nothing can really adequately describe what makes any one person the way they are, as me is an endlessly unique term. Only "me" describes me. I like that you were able to so eloquently state that in just the first few lines of the poem.


"But inside Of me i doubt

Can I be ever great?

All of the wonders of life

What can I add to it?"

----- Of course, this can't just be a happy-go-lucky poem. Life isn't all sweet times and happy happenings, so it only makes sense that the poem might not be as well. This pretty effectively sums up the inescapable doubt that I'm sure just about everyone has before they die. I commend you for being able to place your fears in front of us, the reviewers; I know I am not that brave, and that it is easier to hide than to put yourself on display. I will say though, that honestly, most of the time, our doubts are solely our own. For example, your poetry is phenomenal! You might already know that, but maybe you had doubts :) I'm here to say that those doubts are entirely foundless, so keep up the good work! I'll be reading your work as you post it, so expect to see my reviews again xD Cheers!




ShaeSnow says...


Thank you, I'll definitely be posting something soon, hope to see you soon



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Sun Jun 26, 2016 4:37 am
RippleGylf wrote a review...



I really liked this poem, and I think it accurately describes those ponderings of "What makes up me?"

Inside of me is me

given to me by me

All of me is me

made for me by me.

I feel like this initial repetition of "me" is an excellent way to start off the poem and establish what you're trying to say. I'll admit that I don't necessarily know what you're going for here, but that's just a part of poetry, isn't it? Interpretation of poetry requires thought.
See, Inside of me i dream

Of being known and renown

All of the people who see

Appreciating what I do.

But inside Of me i doubt

Can I be ever great?

All of the wonders of life

What can I add to it?

I can definitely relate to these lines. That desire to shine, while doubting you'll ever be able to. And of course, you look at all of these wonderful things others have come up with, and wonder "How am I supposed to fit in?' And yet these thoughts all connect back to the first few lines. These pressures are all coming from within.
And Inside of me there's you

Who guides and is always there

All of the time I'm alive

Showing me errs and the time

Though Inside of me i hold

The dreams of those I'll aid

All of their purpose they see

As long as I show the light

Now this part seems to contradict the first few lines. However, it is just as true, and just as touching. This section refers to the impact others have on us, and the desperate hope that we have influenced others just as much. Since we have been guided, we want to guide others. I absolutely love that.
Yet Inside of me is without

Not for me but for you

All of me is not mine

Meant for service to others

So Inside of me i give

That which has grown

All that I have in me

To work without and well

And then there's responsibility, which, again, we force upon ourselves. There is always a part of us that we give to others, of our own free will.

Overall, I think it is a very well-written poem. You could probably afford to use some more vivid imagery, but you get your point across regardless. Keep writing!




ShaeSnow says...


Thanks for your review, it really means a lot to me.



ShaeSnow says...


Thanks for your review, it really means a lot to me.



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Fri Jun 24, 2016 8:36 pm
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I think that with a little more thought or creative word choices this poem could really become something great. Now don't get me wrong I still like it and think it is well-written but every poem could be improved.

Everyone wants to be famous and liked by the masses and everyone hopes that they'll end up doing something great and won't be forgotten. So this poem is in fact very relatable and true and for that I applaud you. However I do see some room for growth and improvement. First of all, no really one line captures you or makes you think 'wow, how did they come up with that?' Whenever you write a poem you want to make sure that it's to the very best of your ability and that it could maybe even make the reader gasp. Some lines in here are a little confusing or frankly a little cliched. Now I'm sorry if I come across as harsh but I am only trying to help. Overall it's a good poem and shows that you do have talent but a little more effort and creativity could go a long way.




ShaeSnow says...


Thank you for your review, it's really appreciated, I am going to work on it and hopefully it will be better and might even make you gasp.



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Fri Jun 24, 2016 5:06 pm
hunith says...



hi there,

this is interesting, except it was a bit troubling reading and grasping the concept.

i think that, if you had separated it into some sort of stanza, it would have be even better.

All the same, it's a good piece. polish it some more and it will glitter.




ShaeSnow says...


Thank you, I tried that (separating it into stanzas) but it didn't work, I'll try to do something about it.




Who, being loved, is poor?
— Oscar Wilde