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I like the sunny days
When the warm rays shine.
The water of a hose
and squirtguns.
Mommy makes us drinks
for me and my friend.
Kelsey.
We play with doggy
make forts with our toys.
It's why I love 'em sunny days.
But for every sunny day,
_a cloud hangs over.
Sooner or Later.
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Well then. This is really good. I think the only agitating thing is the first part. The sun is repeated, and it dulls the opening. Otherwise its good. Keep me posted on when you submit the rest. I wanna read it all.
Pretty much sums up what I think when I go outside. I love the last three lines.