Raw

I really liked this. It's exactly how I feel about poetry. I liked your use of descriptive yet powerful wordings and thought it really hit home. Only suggestion I would make is maybe add another paragraph in there. Make it more lengthy and change the word them to it. I like how you referred to it as "it." It gave it an identity y I felt.

Hello!
I enjoyed your poem as it seems playful and witty at the same time, and the circular structure brings a nice effect to the reader, leading him to the overall meaning, 'so perfect' which appears twice and then, oh, it's actually 'so raw'. However, I think it would have been even better if you hadn't explicitly defined 'It's not like a book, it's a method', followed by 'another way of thinking'. If you come to think of it, Mallarme once said 'to suggest, that's the dream (ideal)'. Just a thought, anyway
I think the most powerful and beautiful structure is 'How long does an idea need to travel / Before it escapes". Keep writing, you have a knack for surprising fugitive ideas in the mirror of words.

Very nice work ShadowKnight
I could not find any spelling mistakes so good job there
I will say however, even though i enjoyed reading this piece, there was one verse in particular that did not seem to "Fit in", it was this :
"I've found in my poetry
It's not like a book
It's a method"
It seemed rather odd that you would add a personal addition to the poem, i mean i still loved it i just found it a tad strange... But maybe thats not such a bad thing
Anyway, great work friend, keep it up

at first i thought i thought the punctuation needed work but in the end i realised why you decided to let it go and not use it. i thought the lyrics were fab.

i liked the needless of punctuation, where you were able to just let go and write whats on the mind,so i say good job:)

Hey! At first, I was like, whoa, this writer needs to work on punctuation. But then, I kept reading, and I understood why you chose to let it go. Sometimes its nice to just abandon the rules for a change and focus on writing what you need to say. It's quite freeing, actually. One of my favorite things to do is to crack open a spiral notebook, pick up a sharpened pencil, close my eyes, and write what I'm feeling without worrying about punctuation and grammar and sentences and all of that stuff.

I do have one suggestion. If you're going to let go of things that restrict you, like punctuation, it's a great opportunity to jump way out of the box and throw some amazing, off-the-wall details into your work. Just a suggestion. Still, I liked this piece. It was just what your title said it was going to be. Raw.

Keep writing!