I loved this poem, though it was a bit confusing at what it was about it was packed full of emotion and i liked that
Yesterday I cried your name,
Once, twice and once again.
You claim you heard one golden cry
Why then did I hear no reply?
loved this beginning, made me want to read more, i love the third and fourth line, very sweet and i loved "golden cry"
I called again but your heart slept,
I fell down to my knees and wept.
Early eve pre-sunset skies;
You heard, I know, I see your lies
Again you totally made the third and fourth line amazing, those two lines siad so much to me, but i found the first line a bit odd and it didnt flow as well
Yesterday I sang the song
You bid me sing if life was wrong.
I sang until my voice was lost,
My throat sore from winter's frost
Youve dont it again! i loved the last two lines but its just the first two that i dont really get, the rhythm isnt as good - "yestuday i sang the song" was a bit weird - what song? it wasnt meantioned before, please please correct me if i am wrong
I called again, again I tried
Until the moon grew full I cried,
Couldn't breath and couldn't speak
Fell to the ground when I was weak.
OMG i loved this!!! best thing ive heard so , loved it, it was so smooth and full of emotion, it flowed perfectly
Yesterday I felt the chill
Turning the land around me still.
On the eve of spring we were apart,
The frost came down and froze my heart
This one didnt flow as well as the one before but it was still great, good descriptive words and stuff and the last line was so poetic and beautiful
I call to you beyond the gates,
For when you came it was too late.
You claim you heard me call your name,
Now never will I call again.
Did she/he die? is this what it means? when you said gates i kinda imagened heaven but you might have written it to represent something else oh well still loved it
Great poem - best one ive read today
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