Life is not an easy thing.
But especially if you try.
Sometimes things don't go the right way,
And we start asking why...
But love will always carry us,
Throughout each trecherous day.
His Word will always save us.
Is there anything left to say?
Don't worry about where I've been,
As long as I know who You are.
Jesus is The King of Kings!
My only shining star-
Always believe that He's up there,
Despite the fact that life isn't fair.
Be true to your heart and God above,
And you'll recieve His tender love-
Sometimes I tend to get a little bit scared.
Especially when, love becomes shared.
But Love will raise me up!
Don't worry, don't ever give up!
Don't worry about where I've been,
As long as I know who You are.
Jesus is The King of Kings!
My only shining star-
Always believe that He's up there,
Despite the fact that life isn't fair.
Be true to your heart and God above,
And you'll recieve His tender love-
Be true to your heart for as long as you can.
Never give up. No. Never give in.
Life will go on 'cause it's a gift from above-
And you will recieve His tender love.
You will recieve His tender... Love-
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This is a beautifully written poem about the love of God. You used great word choice and rhyme scheme to make this poem flow and really make an impact on the reader. I love the second stanza especially, it speaks such truth in so little space. All in all the poem was great, I loved the topic, the word choice, and your use of descriptiveness, you have a real talent. Keep writing. - Hsarver
I love this, Seraph! I especially love how you had the guts to write a poem on God and I'm really very impressed. Maybe touching it a little...... but a whole poem! Man, you're brave! I'm glad you feel this way about our Lord and you have inspired me greatly! I hope you continue to write on this subject! I will now start my review:
I love the way you rhyme, it makes this poem seem whole.
I can feel what you are thinking in this poem the whole way through. Your poem screams that loud and clear, in a good way.
Your stanzas are all the right length. Perfect and whole.
Nothing in this poem is randomly said.
The way you say; "My only shining star-" is beautiful.
And best of all, this poem speaks right to the heart, the message sent right there.
There is nothing bad or that needs fixing in this poem.
Simply beautiful. I love it. I will quote this for the rest of my life. Bravo. I applaud you noisily.
~Racket
(This is great!)
Wow, this is really inspiring and beautiful!
I can really say as a fellow Christian that it touched my heart! It's really incredible. I don't think there's any mistake at all. It's amazing.
Keep up the good work!
Lovely, truly lovely... This touched me, which never happens!
Loving the chorus. Very nice. Beautiful.
But love will always carry us,
Throughout each trecherous day.
His Word will always save us.
Is there anything left to say?
This verse is great- but I don't like the last line. Could be improved. Seems a little forced... Also, 'treacherous'.
Sometimes I tend to get a little bit scared.
Especially when, love becomes shared.
But Love will raise me up!
Don't worry, don't ever give up!
I don't get bit about shared love. Reword it or get a new one? The rest of the verse is great.
Ending is very satisfactory.
Good job!